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[Pinstripes] Reborn

Jan 09, 2010 11:54

Title: Reborn
Story/Character: Pinstripes / Seth, Elijah
Rating: PG-13 (violence)
word count: 3,299

Written for the brigits_flame prompt of "starting over".

( It was raining in the city, a seemingly endless cold season of drizzling wet and flat gray skies behind a backdrop of square, ugly buildings that left nothing to the imagination in their angular shapes and exposed brickwork. )

fic:scene, story:pinstripes

Comments 19

white_aster January 9 2010, 17:20:50 UTC

<3. :D Oh, Seth. And Elijah, you crazy, crazy bastard. You two deserve each other. :P

darthneko January 10 2010, 20:10:57 UTC

[solemn] Rick was making spluttering noises ALL the way back and through most of the evening. "But! You! Right there and... omg, what where you thinking??" (Elijah says Rick's a mother hen. Rick says that unlike SOME people he has a sense of self preservation. =P)

white_aster January 11 2010, 18:32:40 UTC

Caleb whole-heartedly agrees, and thinks that Rick should come work for him instead. Less heart attacks, more fun, better perks! :D

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darthneko January 10 2010, 20:11:11 UTC

eeee. ^___^ Thank you.

more_dragoncelt January 10 2010, 01:47:36 UTC

Despite the length of this submission, I read it all the way through. You, my friend, are a wordsmith. It was no effort to read it and I felt drawn into your world. Well done!

darthneko January 10 2010, 20:11:30 UTC

#^_^# Thank you so much! I'm really glad you liked it.

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darthneko January 10 2010, 20:11:54 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad to know that came through. ^_^

subieko January 10 2010, 04:16:47 UTC

Ooo, I like this. You get a sense of this whole complicated world, but without the story getting bogged down in too much detail. And the dynamic between Benson and Xian/Seth really pulled me in.

darthneko January 10 2010, 20:12:33 UTC

Thank you! And very good to know - I was hoping it hadn't gotten too wordy for itself. ^_^