The Lie of Omission for brighty18

[yndigot]

For a number of reasons, this turned into a bit of a rush job. I'll probably edit this up a bit before I post it anywhere else, but I wanted to get this up before the deadline.

Title: The Lie of Omission
Author: Curley Green (yndigot)
Rating: PG
Word Count: ~1000
Challenge: For brighty18. Keywords: safe, loved, home. Dialogue: "I'm here." It came out very

Comments

[duck_or_rabbit]

Oh, I love fics that are mainly dialogue, letting the characters do the telling, and this flowed just beautifully! Love this line:

"It's just..." Sirius gave a frustrated sigh. "There has to be some limit, doesn't there? What if this is it?"

because it just hints at self-doubt and yearning for understanding in the most subtle way.

[yndigot]

Yay! Thank you!

I tried to do most of the explanation with the dialogue in this without turning it into an information overload or giving them a whole bunch of lines that sounded completely unnatural. I'm so glad you thought it flowed!

And I love trying to get into Sirius's head. He has so many issues and insecurities to explore...

Anyway, I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Squeeeee!

[brighty18]

Oh, this is lovely and it is EXACTLY what I love! Well done and it's totally going into my memories! Yay!

The dialog worked very, very well and, you know, I cannot imagine it any other way. You write it well and it felt very natural.

And you used the prompts spectacularly. There was none of that "Oh, there went a prompt" sort-of thing at all. Instead, it just flowed very, very naturally.

I very much felt for poor Sirius here. How awful to grow-up thinking that there were limits on love. I could very much see how he would believe that, though. I can also very much understand how he would want to leave on his own terms, to remain in control and have the upper hand.

Oh, and major points for squeezing in the tattoos. Yum!

I loved it!

Re: Squeeeee!

[yndigot]

Thank you! I love trying to get into Sirius's head because he seems so damaged and confused... And I love tattooed!Sirius. ^_^ I'm glad the dialogue worked for you. I was a bit afraid of trying to stuff too much in...

It's the first fic I've written and posted in years, and when I got your prompt, this is the scene that immediately popped into my mind. I had so much fun writing this and I'm glad you enjoyed it! It was such a great way to jump back into writing.

[remuslives23]

Oh, I love dialogue driven fics! I loved Sirius' vulnerability and Remus' calm certainty. Lovely! *squishes you*

[yndigot]

HEE!! It's quite a rush getting compliments on my writing from someone whose stories I enjoy so much!

[ladyannikaa]

LOVED IT!!! ^.^

[yndigot]

Thank you! ^_^

[smittenfancy]

*is proud of ju*

♥

[yndigot]

ILU.