Fic: In a Crowded Place, Chapter 2 of ?, PG-13 (L/V/D, Logan POV)

[rubie_so_ho]

Title: In a Crowded Place, Chapter 2 of ?
Author: Amanda (rubie_so_ho)
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 2,375
Characters: L/V/D (Logan POV), mentions of Lamb, Weevil, Etc.
Summary: The threesome go to court and Logan comments on their interaction
Spoilers: up to 2x13
Disclaimer: Oh Rob, you own them...so envious!
A/N: So I'm a whore for comments,

Comments

[rindee]

Oo-wee. Now it's getting fun. Amping up the tension in the triangle. I love it and can't wait to see what happens next. I rather like crazy, more-forceful Duncan; he's a lot more interesting than old Donut, but I don't love Veronica acting a bit too much like a victim. Okay, so Duncan yelled at her, and she cried, but it doesn't seem quite in character for her to just allow him to treat her like that. I'm guessing, however, that she will not continue to permit Duncan to behave this way. Also, although I get why Duncan's return has caused Logan to become insecure, I just don't like it! *Pounds keyboard* Don't worry, it's just the shipper in me; I always want Logan to win. I am enjoying the story and anxiously await the next installment.

[reds_toke]

*deep breath* So I was going to bitch a bit and then I read the other comments. Whoo, VD never made me truly gag but I came really close...and yea! You wrote more. I'm so happy right now. You rock rube!

[anonymous]

I'm actually on V's side - I know that really she's just happy to a mystery to solve, cause it makes her feel like she has goals, etc. but that aside they SHOULD find out who the father is, 'cause the Mannings certainly aren't going to, and there's some guy out there who deserves to know he's a father. And Duncan's cry to drop it for the sake of Lilly? She's gonna want to know one day who her father is and thats a lot easier to find out now rather than 15 years down the track.

It's always a little strange to see Donut emote, but you wrote it well and convincingly, I'm just not sure there's anyone out there that can write a Duncan that I will actually empathise with.

Come on Logan you know you want to act and V its time to be honest with your feelings!

I'm anxious for more!

[havemy_heart]

Ugh! I was annoyed with all of them in this chapter! Annoyed that Duncan exists period, annoyed at Veronica for going into Duncan's room because, to me, she now wants to be with Logan and annoyed with Logan for not standing up for himself or Veronica. I will wait impatiently for the next chapter :-)

[marty2103]

Oooooh what the hell is going on with Veronica, why did she go to Duncan´s room...

I have to tell you, you captured Veronica´s indecision perfectly.

Great job, I cannot wait to see what happened in that room.

[rubie_so_ho]

Thanks for your review. I was starting to think people hated this installment. I got so much flak! But I understand the criticisms. I'm just hoping it's the plot and not my writing!

[marty2103]

You will always get heated reactions if Duncan is in the mix, but your writting is great and as I said before the things Veronica did, they are traditional Veronica attitudes, specially towards Duncan!