Our Goodbyes - a Triolet

[ruo_fidelis]

Our Goodbyes

Finding hope within those eyes
and once having faith in this love,
I fell pray to your lies
finding hope within those eyes.

Now as we give our goodbyes
I feel that I’m tired of
finding hope within those eyes
and once having faith in this love.

Comments

[kawaii_gaara]

Another bitter sweet one but it works really well. I was kind of skeptical with the repeat but it actually flows nicely. I def want to challenge this one~ /saves

[ruo_fidelis]

When half the poem is repetition I can see why you would be skeptical, but I'm glad that you found it to flow well even with the repetition. You should give it a try if you want.