Fic: Not That Sneaky: The Sequel (2/7)

[ryeloza]

Title: Not That Sneaky: The Sequel
Pairing: Ben/Leslie
Rating: R
Word Count: 1200 (this part)
Setting: During Pawnee Commons (this part)
Summary: A sequel to this fic. In other words, five more times Ben and Leslie were caught/interrupted during sex.
A/n: Hey, remember when I thought I was going to get this posted quickly? Probably not, because it

Comments

[shornt]

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You are the master of POV, like every single character you've used for this situation has sounded SO right, SO in character and perfect. You just wrote a full chapter of Andy as Burt Macklin and it's seamless. "After all, he's in love with a criminal mastermind." God, I love this so much. You found a way to take a smutty situation and turn it into just like, idek, a really neat character study in relation to Ben and Leslie's sex life?? IT'S JUST RLY RLY GOOD OKAY. I WILL KEEP BUGGING YOU TO WRITE FASTER.

Also, Ben is really bad at revenge, but Leslie being turned on by him talking about it is so perfect.

[ryeloza]

Thank you! I had never intended to write this pov for this fic, and I'm so glad that it worked! Andy is ridiculously fun to write.

[c00kie]

This is ah-mazing. I love Bert Macklin's pov and Leslie being turned on by Ben's revenge plans and just yeah, this is good stuff.

[ryeloza]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

[americnxidiot]

"Hey, you guys know what would be an awesome revenge? Put syrup in his shampoo bottle."

hahahh this is perfect. oh andy, you're fine but your simple. this is just the best, and i love burt macklin pov and the fact that all of ben's revenge ideas involve sugar, because of course. thank you!!

[ryeloza]

Thank you so much!

[ashisfriendly]

This can't be real. I refuse to believe anyone can write this well and so in character.

"I love that all of your revenge ideas involve sugar."

Perfection. Please never stop ever.

[ryeloza]

Thank you! You know your comments mean the world to me, right?

[ryeloza]

Thanks! The next chapter is coming along slowly but surely.