Help me beat up Kristof!

[saanen]

I'm finishing up the final polish of my last book before sending it out. I'm down to one small section where Kristof, the main character, has altogether too easy a time getting from the place where another character decided he was too dangerous to know and kicked him out of the car, to the house where Kristof is going to look for his friend Gabe

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[barbarakelley]

deer seem awfully prone to near misses with cars--they seem mysteriously entranced with headlights, though I don't know if weredeer are plagued with that liability. Would a near miss on the freeway be of any use to you?

[saanen]

You know, I hadn't thought of this! Kristof is not doing too well at the moment (naturally--he's been through a lot) and it's night-time, so he might very well have some trouble with headlights.

[barbarakelley]

oh, poor Kristof... but you did want to beat him up!

[saanen]

Oh, he gets out of the mess just fine at the end. :)

[barbarakelley]

then there's always packs of stray dogs running deer...

[saanen]

Aha, another excellent idea. I wonder if I can work this in somewhere.... I don't know if it would work for this scene, but I think it might fit in an earlier scene I'm thinking of.

[barbarakelley]

if you don't want to be too violent, getting cockleburrs in ones coat can be very annoying...

[saanen]

The final straw for him, poor guy! On top of everything else, he's got cockleburrs stuck all over him. Jasper chews them out with his teeth, and he absolutely doesn't care about other coat problems so they must be aggravating.

[bezigebij]

Or a near death hunting experience...

[saanen]

And it's autumn in my story! I hadn't thought about hunters either, since the action takes place in a large city, but there are a few scenes where Kristof travels through some outlying countryside. I think I can work this in too. Thanks!

[sina_says]

i have no real suggestions but your storyline reminds me of something out of laurel hamilton's anita blake novels. though probably with less sex...

[saanen]

Hehe, yeah, undoubtedly less sex. I haven't read the Anita Blake novels, but I've heard they're pretty steamy.

[sina_says]

steamy is an understatement. they're porn.

[saanen]

Eww, thanks for the warning. I don't mind sex in novels, but I prefer suggestive to blatant.