Comments | samcarterfic: "Creak" by <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/nandamai">nandamai</a></strong>

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"Creak" by nandamai

Aug 29, 2006 22:20

Title: Creak
Author: nandamai
Rating/Warning: PG
Spoilers: None
Recipient: Lyssie (lyssie)
Request details: "Sam with no backup."

( Creak )

drama, angst

Comments 36

amilyn August 30 2006, 04:16:12 UTC

Very nicely done. I like her gaining support and the confidence of those around her, the few who just can't try anymore. I am all curious about where the guys are, but I like the drugged drink and the confusion along with Sam's ongoing attempts to escape over and over.

nandamai September 5 2006, 22:28:06 UTC

Thanks Amy! I think Sam's curious where the guys are, too. ;)

Excellent! anonymous August 31 2006, 03:30:58 UTC

Very well written! Captivating writing that kept me riveted!
- astrogeologist

Re: Excellent! nandamai September 6 2006, 02:28:00 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

scarimor August 31 2006, 10:14:37 UTC

That was riveting. Love your style.

nandamai September 6 2006, 02:28:35 UTC

Thanks so much!

partly August 31 2006, 15:09:12 UTC

Wonderful. You captured Sam tenacity and innate intelligence. Perfect job. You also have a talent for creating new characters with very few words. Marab is wonderfully drawn and I wanted to know more about her. Actually, you left me wanting to know more about everything that was happening and will happen.

Great writing.

nandamai September 6 2006, 02:29:43 UTC

Thank you! Marab came to me fully formed, like Athena. The name, too -- I never considered calling her anything else.

Glad you liked it!

poohmusings August 31 2006, 20:08:05 UTC

I love how this story develops, how we can see Sam struggling to remember who she is, and how she remembers things little by little. And the details are great throughout; I especially like how she was drawing circles in the sand before she fully realized what the circles symbolize. And then later, when she remembers the guys, she draws three stick figures in front of a circle. For some reason, that image really stuck with me. Bravo.

nandamai September 6 2006, 02:33:10 UTC

Thanks! And you guessed it was me, too. Somehow this does not surprise me. I love the circle image, too. And I imagine how frustrating it would be for her to know there are these three other people, and possibly feel how close they were to her, but not be able to picture their faces.

All that flailing, man ... when I finally sat down to do it, I wrote the whole thing in two hours and made very few changes. Clearly my subconscious was working while I wasn't.