I need constructive crit.

[samvstehworld]

Hi people. I need constructive criticism on this. I feel like towards the end it starts to lose it's feel. The prologue is a dream sequence, which is meant to be all crazy and not make too much sense, and when he's awake it's supposed to make more sense. I don't know if you understand on what I'm saying, just please, tell me honestly what you think

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[female_hysteria]

Talking cats should never be ignored.

[vitamin_ala]

i wanna get inside you head jeeeeez