More Richer Than My Tongue, Part 5

[sanginmychains]

Title: More Richer than my Tongue - Part 5
Rating: R
Pairing: Jack/Ianto
Notes, credits: This part owes everything to antelope-writes, who generously shared hundreds and hundreds of words of her thoughts on what the deep and important issues between Ianto and Jack would be at this point in the story. If you haven't checked out her metas, you really should; her

Comments

[adafrog]

Ouch. But at least they're getting it all out.

[sanginmychains]

It's either that or fester, fester, fester, BOOM. Well. Bigger boom.

[cherry_soup888]

Just...argh!...and sob!...and oh!
This is fic is utterly, heart wrenchinlgy, soul destroyingly good. Everything about it.
The way you write the closeness and uncomfortableness, the tension and longing and tone and atmosphere - all of it, every word is beautiful.

[sanginmychains]

Heh, thanks! When i read it just before posting, I had my usual moment of being certain it was clunky and nonsensical, so I'm glad you got all the stuff I put in there.

[antelope_writes]

I can definitely see--shall we say--bits we've discussed before?

Very interesting...

[sanginmychains]

OMG I totally forgot to credit you! It's fixed now. Talking the Jack/Ianto damage over with you was hugely helpful, it was the pillar of this section. I didn't end up putting in everything that I could have, but a conversation that contained everything at once would be an essay in dialogue form, not a human interaction, so stuff had to go. But I think I hit the highlights of their biggest fears and grudges. No shortage of grievances to choose from here, that's for sure.

[antelope_writes]

Oh no, that totally wasn't a swipe or veiled begging for credit! Not at all! (embarassed!antelope is embarassed) Just a statement of what is.

You could have them fighting for months and months and not come right out with everything that needs to come out. I like how you did it.

[sanginmychains]

I could have phrased it better -- I totally know you weren't begging for credit treats. But I did mean to credit you before I posted, so seeing you in my comments just reminded me.

[shara50]

Oh boy at least they are taking and not hitting!

[sanginmychains]

Heh, I don't think I'd be capable of writing a fist fight between these two without their pants suddenly being gone about halfway through.

[demotu]

*bats eyelashes expectantly*

[sanginmychains]

Woo, made you cringe! Excellent. I hope I didn't hit the pathetic fallacy too hard, but I figured I could get away with it since I'm riffing on Lear, the play with which most of us learned the term 'pathetic fallacy."

Thanks.