Colby's chest - Revised

[canadiana1]

Challenge: Chest

Title: Colby’s chest - Revised
Pairing/Characters: David, Don, mention of Colby
Rating/Category: PG13
Word Count: 217
Spoilers: none

Comments

[canadiana1]

Thanks Candi for your suggestions! As soon as I've seen them I wanted to try to apply them.

Please always let me know if you notice something I can change or improve.

Take care,
Anaid

[mustangcandi]

I love what you added! This paints a brighter picture and added a richness to the story! Well done. Again, if you want any help, someone to read over for grammar and whatever, I'll gladly help. I would love to see more of your stories here. Like I said before, you really have a gift for dialogue.