also a bit "choke"ish. it's good. funny. does it bother you when i catch the little mistakes and correct them? b/c if so, i'll stop doing it. they just catch my eye. things like spelling or punctuation or whatever. there's only a couple on here so let me know if you need them pointed out. capiche? is that even spelled correctly?
I agree with Jessica. It reminded me of Choke almost immediately. Which doesn't mean it isn't good. It's written well. It's just not as original as some of your other work. xx ari P.S. Why are you always incoporating someone's ex girlfriend into your stories?
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it's good. funny.
does it bother you when i catch the little mistakes and correct them? b/c if so, i'll stop doing it. they just catch my eye. things like spelling or punctuation or whatever.
there's only a couple on here so let me know if you need them pointed out.
capiche?
is that even spelled correctly?
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xx ari
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Job well done. ((applaus))
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Which doesn't mean it isn't good. It's written well.
It's just not as original as some of your other work.
xx ari
P.S. Why are you always incoporating someone's ex girlfriend into your stories?
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