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[sillyseamonkey]

here's my new poem. i normally don't post them but i'm looking for some feedback, it's a shortie so if you could read it and comment it wouldn't take too long and it would mean a lot to me. thanx

Comments

[letsmakebiskits]

all the pictures of you ive seen.. no one would ever guess your eyes carry all the sadness of the world... now make one about tacos and canadiens!

[sillyseamonkey]

"i call them canadians because it's not racism if they are too confused to be offended" i love my dad. and you. because you say the best fucking things on earth. sober or not. you will be missed when you move to kansas or carolina or whatever cousinfuckingstate you're moving to. i did not know you had a livejournal. ::quickly adds to friendslist:: <3 <3

[icyblueleopard]

I like it. The last sentence didn't seem to flow the same as the rest. And I don't mean the sentiment behind it, methinks just the wording might not flow the same.but besides that The imagery is sweetly vivid. Its easilly felt and held throughout.

[sillyseamonkey]

awe thank you. i didn't wanna get too deep and sappy *-*

[anonymous]

I love you priss.. not as much as I love dan markus.. but again thats a whole lot of loving <33333

[sillyseamonkey]

i love you too jess... but not as much as i love good charlotte. they're so punk rock.

[detulidx]

holla.

[anonymous]

Hey this is kris,
i think hope is the most important element in human existence its what keeps us going. Just my opinion.

[sillyseamonkey]

kris who?

[sillyseamonkey]

awe thank you lovie. ::Adds to friendlist::