images of broken light

[augustfai]

a kiss, and all was said.
AN ARASHI FICTION QUEST.
Title: images of broken light
Pairing(s): Ohno/Jun
Rating: PG
Word Count: ~3800
Summary: Ohno spends the night at Jun's.
A/N: This fic, besides being written for the a kiss and all was said challenge, is not usually like the ones I post here. The style is very different, for one (though this is how I

Comments

[luthien_mpl]

This was so, so good, I can't even -! *___* You could really feel that quiet peace between them and the underlying tension and then that tension just melting away and it was all so awwwww and... awwwwww. *_____*

[augustfai]

Aw, thank you so much! I love writing tension into fic--it's a delicious thing. ♥ Glad you enjoyed!

[boblemon]

Aw, so much love for this right now. I especially like the shifting perspectives, that Ohno knows what Jun is thinking and how to properly treat him and that Jun is getting all flustered even though he's pretty 'experienced'.

There was a lot I liked about this, but my favorite line was: Jun's instant remedy to any tension in his body: Ohno beginning a sentence with his name. You use a lot of abstract references in this, but not enough that it's distracting. I really like the contrast of what they're thinking and what they're feeling. Seriously, good job. ^.^

[augustfai]

♥! Thank you so much for your lovely comment! I'm glad to see the random things I threw in there weren't too overbearing. And of course I'm happy that you enjoyed the fic. :)

[myjulien]

Oh, amazing. I really liked how everything flowed together. Beautiful! And such an underrated pairing!

[augustfai]

♥ Thank you so much, love! I wasn't sure about this style at first and how it would all blend together, but it's good to see that people liked it. And oh yes--this is an underrated pairing indeed.

[berniechan]

♥ beautiful.

[augustfai]

Thank you very much! ♥

[rinalin]

This was wonderful. I love the style, I love the feeling generated. I love how badly Jun needs this and how Ohno responds in his Ohno-way.

[augustfai]

Ahh, thank you for your comment! I really wasn't sure about this style but I'm glad it went over well for some. :) (Love your icon, too.)