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sinners_tongue

Chapter 22

Oct 04, 2007 08:38

Chapter 22

Despite their torrid argument, Jack was rewarded with a good night’s rest. Encouraged by high spirits, he’d eaten a whole bowl of thick soup Elizabeth had wordlessly handed him before dozing off into an exhausted sleep. He must have slept well into the morning, for when he woke, all was silent, save for the birds who warbled in their full ( Read more... )

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vis_venti October 4 2007, 11:46:15 UTC

That was a very nice chapter. I love the fact that the real events are not said face to face between the characters but they are hidden within their thoughts or even in letters they never sent. I guess there will come the time when it will be a verbal confenssion but there needs to be an enscalation of the tension.
No Asterix in this chapter but the humorous lines did not go unnoticed!
Well done luv, keep the good writing, your obsession with cliffhangers is quite clear ;P
Cruel writer!

ladyofthesilent October 5 2007, 07:48:02 UTC

I admit I have a thing for cliffhangers ... I am truly sorry ;)

You're absolutely right in saying that one day, Jack and Elizabeth need to talk about it all, but I don't think they're ready for that, yet. Still, as is implied in this chapter, there may occur a change of tide, so something about their relationship might change. If it makes things easier remains to be seen.

So glad you enjoyed this chapter, along with the humour!

Thanks for the feedback, it's greatly appreciated!

azulada October 4 2007, 23:26:25 UTC

YES! I knew it was real! (The window scene is the object of my glee)

This is one of my favorite chapters yet! The letters made me tear up. Beautiful.

ladyofthesilent October 5 2007, 07:50:13 UTC

Thanks a lot!

This chapter was basically written to establish that Jack and Lizzie thought about each other during those ten years between AWE and CotST. Of course, they wouldn't admit it face to face with the other, but now that Jack knows Lizzie definitely missed him, something will change ;)

Thanks again for the feedback!

gea_luv October 4 2007, 23:28:02 UTC

Oh, how beautiful this chapter was.

I felt as if I truely was in the mind of Jack Sparrow from his sufferings to his newfound elation. I loved it when he thought of past loves like Charlotte; which caught me by surprise as I don't think I've ever encountered a fanfic where there was a truely believeable past love for Jack (not some Mary Sue) and such an interesting end.

The letters were wonderful.

His heart leapt with glee when he discovered that it was covered in writing - the same uneven, cramped handwriting that had told him that somewhere someone had actually missed him.That sentence left me choked up with tears for some reason as it's very true how Jack has been a sort of loner all of his life and to have someone miss him - and not just anyone which would contribute to his happiness further - is just so beautiful ( ... )

ladyofthesilent October 5 2007, 07:57:36 UTC

Oh, thanks so much ( ... )

obfusc8er October 5 2007, 08:51:36 UTC

The flashes of stark imagery in the beginning of the chapter (the deaths of Jack's mother and Charlotte) made for great contrast with the lighter mood at end. Really nice work.

I do hope Jack at least acknowledges the trouble (and work and even embarrassment) Elizabeth has gone through to save his hide, even if she has been just as cranky about it as he has.

Loved the whole bit where Jack ponders the effects of aging. Profane, indeed! That was excellent.

His admirers deserved a statelier exit; a grander finale than his dying in a bed, on land and without his boots and coat--especially after he’d loused his search for the Fountain of Youth.

Although true to character, lines like this scare me. It made me think, for a moment, that Jack might do something incredibly stupid. And well he might, still, I suppose.

What a great ride. Thanks, and keep it coming!

ladyofthesilent October 5 2007, 11:19:03 UTC

Thanks to you for always taking the time to gift us with such detailed feedback!

First of all, it's great that the mixture between humour and more serious moments works for you. I'm actually all for the angsty stuff, but it's hard to keep Jack in-character without making use of some humour now and then. It's, after all, what we love him for :)

Even before AWE brought the whole immortality-business into play, I always wondered how Jack would deal with getting on in years. Most fanfic-authors had him drink from the FoY so he kept his youthful appearance, which, I admit is a rather nice idea, but personally, I think it's just as interesting to see how age is affecting him. In this story, he is supposed to be in his mid-40s, probably already approaching 50.

Of course, age wouldn't keep Jack from doing something incredibly stupid ... after all, he's still Captain Jack Sparrow!

Thanks again for your review, it's greatly appreciated!

ditte3 October 5 2007, 09:59:56 UTC

I love this chapter so much.So many feelings,thoughts memories.It was beautiful how we can see Jack's past through his thoughts.I also like the scene where Jack read Elizabeth's letter,and how it afected him when it wasn't finished and how it gave him some kind of hope.The whole chapter was wonderful and wells written.You have such a talent.I can't wait for the next chapter.

ladyofthesilent October 5 2007, 11:23:15 UTC

Thanks!

We couldn't picture Jack talking about his past at this point of the story, so we figured it might be best to introduce parts of it through toughts and memories.

Personally, I feel that Elizabeth always found it rather hard to talk about her feelings (just remember she never told Will she loved him, even though she did). We just couldn't see her breaking down and crying or something like that, so we needed to find another way to inform Jack that she actually missed him. That's how the letter-idea was born!

The next chapter will be online next week :)