A Hero Born Amongst Hundreds

[sinnesspiele]

I am experimenting with this writing contest to see if it will help raise the bar of my creativity.

Words: 177
Warnings: None

I am a hero.

I wear no cape or mask.  I am not from another planet or the result of failed science.  Biologically we are the same, you and I - only I am stronger; strong enough to push you down; strong enough to tell you that

Comments

[unnameduntamed]

I love this piece! It's the sort of view that I take when I think about some 'heroes' - they wouldn't be considered as such if it wasn't for the support of the majority and the conformist nature of society. Love it.
I paticularly like your last line;
"For without the majority to validate my heroism, I would be the villain. But I am not. I am a hero to those who conform. And you, free-thinker, are my archenemy."

[sinnesspiele]

Thank you. As I mentioned to another, the concept of blurred villainy and heroism is one I find very appealing. It is all about perspective when it comes to determining who is the hero and who is the villain.

[katden]

Whoa! I completely dig what you've done here :) Terrific way to start, in my opinion.

Welcome to the FLAME!

[sinnesspiele]

Thank you.

[sinnesspiele]

Thank you. The concept of blurred villainy and heroism is one I am very intrigued by.

[fawatson]

Nice twist

[sinnesspiele]

Thank you.

[belluminabyssus]

I applaud your ability to do something totally different than anything else I've seen at this community, so bravo!

The one criticism I have is this: it doesn't read like a first person account of one's thoughts. It reads as a philosophical text. As fiction, I would have liked to see this framed in more of a narrative, where this is the subtext but not the actual text -- i.e, this is the meaning one would take away from it. But as a philosophical piece, I think it works fine.

Nice job & welcome to the community!

[sinnesspiele]

This was written more as a philosophical work than one of straight fiction, so I am very glad it translated more strongly for you as such. Thank you for reading.

[belluminabyssus]

Well in that case, you certainly pulled it off! :]