Comments | skyvehicle: Hiding and Seeking -- House/Cuddy

skyvehicle

Hiding and Seeking -- House/Cuddy

Jan 25, 2007 02:28

TITLE: Hiding and Seeking
PAIRING: House/Cuddy, non-sexual.
RATING: PG-13
WORD COUNT: 1,663
SUMMARY: House finds Cuddy hiding under her desk. Cuddy has a moment of weakness, and House lets her keep it.
DISCLAIMER: Do not own.
NOTE: Cuddy is such a strong woman, n'est pas? Surely, she has to have a few cracks sometime. Probably tiny little blips ( Read more... )

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Comments 16

cincoflex January 25 2007, 12:41:25 UTC

Interesting imagery, and potentially cool idea. I wish there had been more to it all though--House is done very well, but I'm not so sure about Cuddy.

skyvehicle January 25 2007, 17:37:27 UTC

Thanks for that. At least I got House right. I just imagine that sometimes Cuddy has a moment of weakness, and she can't control when. SO instead of people walking in on her crying, maybe she'll just... hide under her desk.

goddesspharo January 25 2007, 14:19:56 UTC

I loved House getting under the desk too.

“What’s so special about squeezing a mini-person out of your vagina, anyway?”
HAH!

skyvehicle January 25 2007, 17:40:10 UTC

hehe. Glad you enjoyed that. It's just so blunt and 'what the hell?' and so House.

allibabab January 25 2007, 14:59:47 UTC

I love the premise for this, and I think you did a nice job with the dialogue (which can be a pretty impressive feat!). Really liked the ending lines too. Nice job with this!

skyvehicle January 25 2007, 17:41:11 UTC

I struggle with dialogue on a daily basis, so I appreciate that! Awesome.

y0bb January 25 2007, 16:37:25 UTC

This would be fantastic to see on teevee. Why can't they deal with the baby arc already?

skyvehicle January 25 2007, 17:42:21 UTC

Yeah, I really want more about this freaking baby already, more than needles in the butt, a pregnancy test and House being a shit to her. It needs to be addressed for real.

rin_gray January 25 2007, 18:39:18 UTC

Wow, I think you did a fantastic House voice in this! His affection is really obvious without making it schmoopy or out of character. The snark is lovely too, especially liked:

“I want this for all the wrong reasons, and that’s why it isn’t working.”

“If you’re planning on selling your baby to human trafficking, then I don’t know what to tell you.”

I found the tenses used a bit odd, but that may be because I'm not terribly familiar with the style you used. (ex: One floor up, House will make his way into a chair of his own with plans to ignore his minions and catch up on some sleep. He will not have a patient to deal with, and he will not have needed to use the MRI at all, thus he will have had no reason to go see Cuddy at all.) All in all though, I think it's something that could grow on me, in that it sounds kind of like those old English movies where a kindly narrator tells us what is happening and what will later happen offscreen ( ... )

skyvehicle January 27 2007, 17:08:44 UTC

The style I used wasn't really a style, as much as I wanted to have an intro leading up to the action, and then a conclusion using the same tense as the intro. I just thought it was a little classier than just typing INTRO. CONCLUSION. etc. Or maybe it's a situation that might not have happened yet, but if it did, it will happen this way, like what you said about the old English movie narration.