LJ Idol, Week Five: Build a Better Mousetrap

[slammerkinbabe]

Short story for LJ Idol this week. I don't even know when I last wrote original fiction. Jumping back in with both feet, because there's no other way to do it, I guess.

Topic: "Build a Better Mousetrap"
Trigger warning: [select black bar to view] mental illness (bipolar disorder)

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Comments

[jem0000000]

Oh, poor kid. And her poor mother -- such a tough situation.

[slammerkinbabe]

Yeah, it's no fun for anyone involved. (In an original version Ashley had more of a role too, but I cut it down drastically.) Thank you for commenting!

[jem0000000]

You're welcome.

[ljidolvillian]

Well done. The characters are well developed. Eerily so at the length.

[slammerkinbabe]

Thank you so much! That means a lot.

[i_17bingo]

"You love your daddy for who he is. You don't want me to go back on those bad pills, do you, sweetheart?”

I'm bipolar, and I recognized what was happening almost instantly. This was .really heartbreaking and totally realistic

[slammerkinbabe]

Thank you so much. I'm bipolar as well (though, thankfully, medicated and not prone to dropping hundreds of dollars on new mousetrap designs :P) and telling it from the perspective of the family member is obviously a bit of a different angle for me, so I'm so glad you found it realistic.

[eternal_ot]

Aww..:/ i wish it ended better..quite a story..tugged my heart..well done..:)

[slammerkinbabe]

Thanks so much! (I've considered writing a followup to the story if there's ever an Idol topic that seems to suit, so maybe things will end more kindly for Chelsea and the rest of them there...)

[eternal_ot]

that's good to hear..:)

[mamas_minion]

“Because they're bad for me. They make me slow. They make me stupid. I can’t think when I’m on them, it’s like someone shoved cotton balls in my brain.”

That part hit me pretty hard I felt that way when I was on anti depressants. very good piece.

[slammerkinbabe]

Yeah, it's pretty awful, the tradeoffs you're often forced to make when it comes to psych meds. It's so complicated and frustrating. However, I'm glad you liked the piece. :)