You did a really nice job setting the scene here. I can actually feel the poor guy's pain as he's trying to move and he can't even open his eye. :(
I love the subtle undertones when he's talking with his parents, how he knows something is off and how he feels like he shouldn't be taking the moment for granted even as he's being a total smartass to his father. (That's just so Ollie. He always has to throw in the sarcastic comments...)
Fiancee. Dislike. (Is it wrong I may have snickered a little when he couldn't come up with a face to go with the name? Clearly she's not important). Anyway, I love his mother's outrage and his father's exasperation with him.
Awww, he's missing something important...*grins*
Great start. I'm already intrigued by this and look forward to seeing what happens next. ♥
or why he has parents all of a sudden? And as you said this is NOT an AU fic...which means that this is either a dream or a deliberate changeing of his life to get something out of him, More please!
I'm confused. And your author's note made me even more confused.
But it's a good confusion, a what will happen? Actually, a I need to know what will happen before I go insane or start doing drugs or become a stripper out of curiosity. So you need to update soon, before I lose my mind. *drama queen*
This was really awesome, I was in need to read something awesome and intriguing. And I have so many questions, I like when a prologue makes me feel like this.
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You did a really nice job setting the scene here. I can actually feel the poor guy's pain as he's trying to move and he can't even open his eye. :(
I love the subtle undertones when he's talking with his parents, how he knows something is off and how he feels like he shouldn't be taking the moment for granted even as he's being a total smartass to his father. (That's just so Ollie. He always has to throw in the sarcastic comments...)
Fiancee. Dislike. (Is it wrong I may have snickered a little when he couldn't come up with a face to go with the name? Clearly she's not important). Anyway, I love his mother's outrage and his father's exasperation with him.
Awww, he's missing something important...*grins*
Great start. I'm already intrigued by this and look forward to seeing what happens next. ♥
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Great job :)
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But it's a good confusion, a what will happen? Actually, a I need to know what will happen before I go insane or start doing drugs or become a stripper out of curiosity. So you need to update soon, before I lose my mind. *drama queen*
This was really awesome, I was in need to read something awesome and intriguing. And I have so many questions, I like when a prologue makes me feel like this.
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