to infinity, live with no end (4/5 of The Mothers series)

[fibres]

to infinity, live with no end
No pairing, from Junsu's mother's POV.
Fluff, G; 1,100 words.
Even when you can't see them, it's always been the mothers that have been secretly supporting them, encouraging them. This is the story of DBSK's mothers, and how they cope with their sons' fame.
Yunho's mother. | Jaejoong's mother. | Yoochun's mother.

Comments

[fibres]

alsdkafds thank you! :)♥

[jaeminnie]

I finally read all the series installments out so far, and I like your writing style. It's...I don't know, quiet and understated, but still communicates a lot to the reader. It's also unique.

She’s fussing over Junho’s appearance when Junsu calls, outside the house waiting with his manager in order to pick up Junho to take him with them to film a variety show.

I feel like that's overly wordy and awkward in structure; I'm guessing it was hard to fit all of that information into one sentence. :/ Maybe one of these would work better:

She's fussing over Junho when Junsu calls; he's waiting outside with his manager to pick up Junho to film a variety show.

She's fussing over Junho when Junsu calls to say that he's waiting outside with his manager to pick up Junho for the filming of a variety show.

Just a bit of constructive criticism. :)