Turning Back (5/?)

[songforevela]

Title: Turning Back (5/?)
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[tbq]

Hurrahz! A new chapter!

I have been waiting every patiently for this one, as it is currently a favorite of mine.

I do enjoy that you've made a recovery time for Edward's transition from vampire to human. Most stories that have him miraculously turn into a human have him change over and he's fine. He had been a vampire for what, ninety years? I don't think a body would rebound so quickly.

I do love the drama you have building, especially with the fact that Rosalie's desire for humanity dancing around in the background. It would amuse me to no end if Bella turned into a vampire once one of the other ones bit her. And then more drama would ensue if poor Edward couldn't switch back. Not saying that you should even consider that, at all, but it would be amusingly torturous. :)

Can't wait for your next installment. Perhaps, some E/B bed action in the next one? Yes? No? Maybe? :D

[songforevela]

I'm glad to hear you think Edward's transition makes sense! I haven't read other Edward-turns-human stories, but it has always made sense to me that it would be difficult on his body. I mean, he's basically going from being dead to being alive! That's got to take it's toll :)

I agree, that would be extremely torturous. So much so, that it would pain me to go there. There will certainly be some more drama, but not quite that much drama.

And man, I'm hoping for some E/B bed action eventually, I've just got to get the nerve write it! It didn't quite work to put an entire scene in this chapter, considering he's supposed to be recovering, but I will desperately try and make it work later.

Thanks so much for reading and your awesome comments!

[aliceinforks]

so pretty.

[songforevela]

Thank you!

[earmuffitforme]

wonderful - this chapter was great - my favorite was edward and bella going for walks and edward leaning on bella for support. can't wait for the next chapter (: good writing! (:

[songforevela]

I like Edward and Bella taking walks too. I just like the pace of that; a lot slower than all of the running around they do now.

Thanks for reading!

[sal_lumos]

I love that he's HUMAN! I usually don't want him to be (cuz the vampire thing is so damn hot) but he's just so sweet and fragile.

:)

[songforevela]

The vampire thing is totally hot, I agree! But I also think fragile Edward is pretty hot, too :)

Thanks for commenting!!

[nebakanezer]

He cuts me off. "Bella, none of that matters. None of that has ever mattered. You, you, are everything to me." I knew it! Yay! I'm so glad that Edward is happy and I love seeing his slow recovery.

Love this part: His senses lack the sharpness he's used to, but Edward seems to love these softer edges.

Of course I was wondering what Rosalie was thinking in all this. I think tension between Rose and Alice is very realistic. I wouldn't think Alice would want to be human again though, she has no idea what that means. And Emmett, I suppose he would do anything for Rosalie but I wonder if he would want it as much as she would or would just be happy to make her happy.

I have no idea where you are going but I'm eager to see.

And I think I like the present tense. I didn't mind the past but this works well too :)

[songforevela]

Yay! You were right! I knew you were right about Edward's happiness with becoming human, but I had to draw it out a little longer :)

There is more to come with the siblings in the next chapter...I think your intuitions are right on.

And thank you for your comment about the tense change! I think it fits my writing style a little better.

Thank you so much for reading; I always look forward to your comments!

[nebakanezer]

Hehe, I can see why you didn't say anything. :)

Aw. I look forward to reading more too! :) I'm not a huge Edward!human fan but I am enjoying your story very much. :)