One Piece: Bound For Glory - Chapter 10 Part 4:
"Whatever! You guys fight here!" David yelled
Brian: (David) I’m going to run here and hide under this rock and wet myself with fear, because that’s all I’m good for.
William: (David) Come! Get with it and tire her out! This is what I recruited you for! So that I don’t have to fight myself! Because that’s icky.
still suffering from Kit's kick.
The Voice: We’ve seen him get stabbed in the torso six fucking times and get up as if nothing has happened. We’ve seen him fall from the roof of a two-storey building, head first, and get up and continue to fight. We’ve seen him get thrown through solid concrete and barely feel it. WE’VE SEEN HIM ACT AS IF HE DOESN’T HAVE A SINGLE NERVE ENDING IN HIS BODY! WHY WOULD THAT PUNY LITTLE KICK SEND HIM DOWN?
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 18
"Right.." Kit smiled as she placed her hat on Riru's head, "Aww you look so cute!" Kit then began to hug Riru.
Brian: WHAT ARE YOU FUCKING DOING? THERE IS A FUCKING TIME AND PLACE! TRAITS AND QUIRKS ARE USED FOR FUCKING COMEDY SEQUENCES! THIS IS NOT AT ALL FUNNY! YOU ARE GOING TO BEAT UP A WOMAN WHO HAS BEEN PREJUDICED AGAINST ALL HER LIFE SO YOU CAN ROB HER OF HER SHIP! THIS IS NOT THE TIME TO BE FROLICKING AROUND, ACTING GAY!
William: And I see that, despite Riru’s protests, Kit is still going to sexually harass her. And after David and Avery complained? She immediately stopped. Stuthor, if you are going to be sexist, can you at least be SUBTLE about it?
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 27
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 19
"Okay...please let go...we...need...to...fight...Karma!"
Brian: (Riru) Yes, we need to beat the shit out of a random girl on the street so that we can steal her stuff. *Resumes normal voice* I don’t know which is worse, this or the fact that this Stuthor apparently thinks Rape is Okay When It’s Female on Female.
Riru sighed heavily while releasing a large breath of air
William: THAT IS BLOODY SIGHING! WHAT DO YOU THINK SIGHING MEANT? HOW CAN SUCH A SIMPLY CONCEPT ELUDE YOU? HAVE YOU NEVER SIGHED IN YOUR LIFE?
DEPARTMENT OF REDUNDANCY DEPARTMENT: 12
after being released from Kit's death hug.
Brian: People do not sigh when they are SUFFOCATING! The feeling of suffocation comes because the body does not have enough oxygen! She should be taking a deep breath in, you MORON!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 20
"You two are my opponets?
Brian: Of course, the GIRLS are going to fight the woman, and the Big Strong Men are going to lounge around and watch. After all, there’s no way GIRLS can ever be competent enough to go up against MEN, so they might as well deal with their own kind, right?
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 28
Then let us begin!" Karma jumped into the air and began to spin on her way down.
Brian: What the FUCK is she trying to do? How the FUCK is that going to help her win at all? Fighting is not acrobatics! It doesn’t matter how fancy the moves you pull are! What matters is actually HURTING the opponent and making sure they can’t get back up! How the fuck is going airborne going to help that? And how the fuck is SPINNING going to help? What is she going to do? Try and land on top of her opponents? Don’t she know there’s fucking two of them?
William: And how nice of you to gang up on her. You know, even fucking DARKLORDS have enough common decency to train their mooks to attack one at a time.
SOCIOPATHY: 28
SHUT UP, I’M AWESOME: 6
"Let's attack from two diffrent sides!" Riru suggested
William: WHAT ELSE ARE YOU POSSIBLY GOING TO DO? You have two people! It stands to reason that you’ll attack from different sides! What else? Are you going to attack directly behind each other? This is not a brilliant suggestion! This is THE most basic tactic in the fucking world!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 21
as she quikly vanished with her superspeed
The Voice: *Laughs bitterly* Stuthor? That is NOT super speed. Super speed means that she can actually travel faster than everyone else in her world, and that is NOT what is happening here. EVERY GODDAMNED PERSON in your fics can move just as fast as her. Repeating that she has super speed as a power isn’t going to convince us that you’ve made her powerless to make sure she doesn’t outshine your beloved Avatar.
and waited for Karma to land.
Brian: Why wait for her to land? You have a freaking sword! You have a longer reach than her! Wait ‘til she comes in range and stab her! Why wait until she has solid ground under her feet again, and can thus leverage? Why wait until she gets her bearings back? If you’re dishonourable enough to tag team her, you’re can stab her whilst she’s in mid air!
William: And don’t say that she’s jumped out of range! A common katana is around 70 centimetres long, couple with the length of Riru’s arm, there’s no way Karma can ever jump high enough to be completely out of range…unless she’s a grasshopper.
JUST KILL HIM, DAMMIT: 1
Once she did Kit pulled out two daggers and went to slash her.
The Voice: It’s not SLASH! Slash cannot be used as a verb unless you are describing certain activities happening between people of the same gender! It’s CUT! It’s a simple three-letter word! I’m sure you’ve learned in kindergarten!
William: Apparently, after she landed, Riru still did absolutely nothing except sit there and watch. How amazingly helpful. They’ve really chosen the right person to fight this time.
The Voice: To be fair, it’s not like any of them would be intelligent enough to figure out that if you had two people, it would be best to make them attack at the same time.
Brian: And why did Kit wait ‘til she came back down to draw her weapons? That would just be an unnecessary delay! She was in the air long enough for Riru and Kit to move into position! That should be more than enough time for her to get ready with her weapons! She knows she’ll have to use them! Why doesn’t she have them out already?
JUST KILL HIM, DAMMIT: 3
THESAURUS RAPE: 3
Karma jumped back and countered with a kick,
Brian: You’ve JUST landed after spinning around like a fucking ballet dancer! You are not ready to evade attacks like that yet! You’ll still be dizzy and disorientated! This is why you don’t freaking SPIN in battle!
FAUX MADE OF IRON: 4
William: And she had a freaking DAGGER! You know, with a BLADE! You do not put your foot anywhere NEAR something like that! There’s a huge bundle of nerves right behind your ankle that will be the easiest target to cut ever, and if you get that injured, you’ll most likely be crippled for life! It is also going to hurt so horribly that you’ll lose all capacity to fight! It’s one of the most painful injuries you can ever receive! SHE HAS A FUCKING DAGGER! The best thing to do now is to keep your distance and see if you can tire her out!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 22
and from the bottom of her pants a knife slid out and blocked one of Kit's daggers.
Brian: WHAT THE FUCK? Did she have a hidden mechanism hidden in her pants? Why would she build it there? No matter how much you train, you arms and hands will be more agile than you feet! Why not build the mechanism into your sleeves so that you can fight on equal grounds with your opponent? If it’s in your leg, you’ll inevitably have to lower it, because you can’t stand on one foot forever. And it will severely compromise your balance! If you have it in your arm, you can actually remain on both of your feet and balance and attack for as long as you want to!
William: And hidden mechanisms need to be set off by something, like a flick of the wrists. What action did you do here that set it off? Kicking? How is the mechanism supposed to differentiate between kicking and running? You’re thrusting your legs in a certain direction in both situations! How can you prevent the knife from accidentally slipping out and maiming your feet for life?
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 23
Karma then leaped into the air, and kicked at Riru who had came from behind.
The Voice: Who had politely waited until Kit’s barrage of attacks were done before launching her own.
Brian: WHY? Why would you need to be in the air for that? You can kick a person very nicely from the GROUND, you know! The best thing to do here is actually TURN AROUND! Not launch yourself into the air and removing all ability to evade or dodge attacks!
SHUT UP, I’M AWESOME: 7
Karama landed behind Riru
William: HOW? She jumped straight up and apparently flung her legs backwards! She’ll land exactly where she jumped, on her face! How did she manage to get behind Riru?
Brian: And why hasn’t Riru attacked? SHE HAS FUCKING SUPER SPEED! She has more than enough time to stab Karma a dozen times over during the time she’s in the air!
JUST KILL HIM, DAMMIT: 4
and went to kick her,
William: Didn’t she already try to kick Riru? What happened the last time? Did she miss? Did Riru dodge it? THIS IS AN ACTION SCENE! IF YOU CAN SPEND FIVE IDENTICAL SENTENCES HAVING ALL OF YOUR CHARACTERS INTRODUCE THEMSELVES INDIVIDUALLY, THEN YOU CAN SPEND ONE FUCKING LINE ACTUALLY DESCRIBING THE ACTIONS IN AN ACTION SCENE!
DEPARTMENT OF REDUNDANCY DEPARTMENT: 13
but Riru vanished and appeared behind her.
Brian: WHY DID SHE USE HER POWERS WHEN KARMA WAS IN THE AIR? That’s her most vulnerable moment! What, did she spontaneous forget?
JUST KILL HIM, DAMMIT: 5
Riru grabbed her feet,
William: WHY? YOU HAVE A FUCKING SWORD!
Brian: Even if you didn’t have one, you’re in the perfect position to punch her in the head and knock her out! Why go for her feet?
William: And if you want to hold her still, then why not grab her arms (her primary weapons)? Why lunge for such an awkward target? And even if you’ve grabbed her feet, she can still tilt her torso!
JUST KILL HIM, DAMMIT: 6
SHUT UP, I’M AWESOME: 8
while Kit jumped at Karma with two daggers in her hands.
Brian: WE KNOW SHE HAS TWO DAGGERS! YOU’VE ALREADY MENTIONED THAT! SEEING AS YOU DIDN’T DESCRIBE HER CHUCKING THEM AWAY, WE’RE GOING TO ASSUME SHE STILL HAS THEM!
William: Then again, Riru apparently evaded an attack without us ever seeing any mention of it.
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"Nope!" Karma bent backwards dodging Kit's attack,
William: See? If you had just punched her in the head, this wouldn’t have happened, would it? Or if you grabbed any other body part except for her fucking FEET!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 24
she then grabbed Riru's ankles and flipped her.
Brian: WHAT? How is that going to happen? Riru has hold of her ankles! They’re just going to be locked in a loop! Neither of them will let go, so they’ll just topple to their sides in a tangle! You can’t flip someone like that! Especially not when it would involve flipping yourself as well!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 25
William: And I don’t care how many years of contortion you’ve been practicing, bending back so far to grab the ankles of the person grabbing your ankles still takes a horrible amount of time (if it’s not entirely impossible). WHAT IS KIT DOING DURING THIS TIME? LOUNGING AROUND AND FUCKING WATCHING?
Brian: And why hasn’t Riru stood up and stabbed her as soon as Kit’s attack failed? SHE HAS FUCKING SUPER SPEED!
JUST KILL HER, DAMMIT: 8
"Ah!" Riru landed on her back,
William: And that’s because you were A STUPID FUCKING MORON. If you had even half a brain cell, this wouldn’t have happened!
and over her she saw Kit flying forwards
Brian: …Apparently, Kit can fly now. WHAT THE FUCK IS GOING ON? YOU DO NOT GIVE CHARACTERS RANDOM POWERS IN THE MIDDLE OF A FIGHT!
William: Nope, that’s just the same stupidity again. Karma almost got herself killed because she jumped in the air, clearly, this is the perfect tactic to imitate.
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 26
SHUT UP, I’M AWESOME: 9
with a kick to Karma's chest.
Brian: SHE! HAS! DAGGERS!
DAGGERS! ARE! LETHAL!
WHY IS SHE NOT USING THEM?
JUST KILL HIM, DAMMIT: 9
Karma rolled back and landed ontop of David.
The Voice: There is no landing, because she never jumped (for once)! She rolled on top of David!
THESAURUS RAPE: 3
Brian: …I thought David was in front of her. STUTHOR, THIS IS SUPPOSED TO BE AN ACTION SCENE! WE NEED TO KNOW WHERE ALL THE CHARACTERS ARE IN RELATION TO EACH OTHER! IT ONLY TAKES A FEW WORDS TO OUTLINE THE SETTING FOR US! ACTION SCENES DON’T WORK IF YOU HAVE NO IDEA WHERE EVERYONE IS!
"Huh?" David looked at her,
Brian: WHY are you confused? You’ve set your crew on her! You knew they were in a fight! You were stupid enough not to evacuate to a safe distance! What are you confused about?
William: Obviously, he cared so little about his crew that he wasn’t even watching them fight. He was just lounging around in the sun, working on his tan. Because that’s what’s important.
and Karam turned to him. She blushed
The Voice: I swear to god, if this turns into a sappy romance scene, I’m going to murder someone.
William: It still disgusts me to see how much she has transformed from the strong, independent woman at the start of her encounter with David. This is just disgusting.
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 29
then quickly hit David in the groin and jumped off him,
Brian: *Applauds* That’s about the only sensible thing you’ve done so far, since the beginning of this ‘fight’.
"What did I do?" He yelled.
William: Really? You really want me to remind you of what you did?
Brian: Better not. We’d be here all year.
William: Fine. I’ll just pull out ONE sentence then.
"What now crazy lady!" David yelled already annoyed at what she was about to say.
YOU DESERVE TO BE HIT IN THE GROIN. YOU DESERVE EVERYTHING SHE CAN POSSIBLY DO TO YOU AND MORE. THERE IS NOTHING YOU DO NOT DESERVE FOR THAT.
SOCIOPATHY: 29
FAUX MADE OF IRON: 5 (Stuthor, PEOPLE WHO HAVE BEEN ATTACKED IN THE GROIN CANNOT YELL OR EVEN SPEAK. I will happily show you exactly what I mean, if you’re really that stupid.)
"Ha!" Riru held both of her swords to Karma's neck.
Brian: WHY HASN’T SHE DONE THIS BEFORE? WHY?
ONOMATOPOEIAS ARE COOL: 6
"Hmph." Karma grunted as she ducked down and rolled forwards.
ONOMATOPOEIAS ARE COOL: 7 (Seriously, why is this one even here? What does she possibly have to grunt about?)
William: NO! YOU CANNOT DO THAT! If a sword if pressed against your neck, you cannot duck down! A person has JAWBONES! And those are mostly wider than you neck! If you duck down, you’ll shave a third of your own head off! ANATOMY DOESN’T WORK LIKE THAT!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 27
She then jumped up and axe kicked Kit,
Brian: Completely forgetting that there’s a person behind her (she is behind her right? I have no idea) who has two lethal weapons in her hand and SUPER FUCKING SPEED.
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 28
Kit jumped back.
William: And what is Riru doing throughout all this? She is standing RIGHT BEHIND Karma, and Karma is completely open to her! She has every chance to stab her in the back and end this whole thing!
JUST KILL HIM, DAMMIT: 10
Though she was cut by a hidden knife in Karma's pants leg.
Brian: Seriously, HOW does those mechanism work? What sets them off and how are they retracted? And why the FUCK hasn’t Riru killed Karma yet?
"Here we go!" Riru ran up behind Karma,
Brian: RAN UP? Nonononono, it doesn’t work like that! Riru pressed her katana to Karma’s neck, which means she’s within one step from Karma. Karma ducked down and did one roll forward before standing up. At most, they’re a metre and a half apart. Riru should be able to stab her to death if she just takes a small step forward! There is nowhere to RUN! There’s only a metre between them!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 29
grabbed her leg with the hilt of one sword and tripped her,
William: HOW do you GRAB someone with the hilt of a sword? Hilts of swords are HARD! They are not flexible! They cannot wrap around someone’s ankles! It doesn’t freaking work like that! And if she’s not going anywhere, then you can’t trip her! The reason people trip is because their bodies still have momentum in them, but their feet have suddenly stopped moving! Karma is standing still and kicking Kit! She’s not going anywhere! You CAN’T trip her!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 31
Riru then jumped in the air
Brian: Because it worked so well when someone else tried it before.
SHUT UP, I’M AWESOME: 11
and stood over Karma with one blade pointed to her face.
William: WHY would she need to jump for that? Karma is already tripped! She’s on the ground! Riru doesn’t need to do ANYTHING to stand over her! And if she wanted to be even higher than Karma, then jumping doesn’t work! She’s only going to be in the air for a few seconds before she has to come down again! She just randomly jumped in place when she could be ensuring that Karma doesn’t stand back up! WHAT IS YOUR CHARACTERS DOING? WHAT DO YOU THINK YOU ARE WRITING? AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!
Brian: I’m kind of happy that this means it will be easy as peaches to kill every last one of these bastards, however.
While Kit came up and held two guns to Karma's face.
Brian: Wait, her guns STILL had bullets in them? How many bullets do their clips hold? AND IF SHE HAD A GUN, WHY DID SHE SPEND THE ENTIRE FIGHT USING DAGGERS? WHY DIDN’T SHE BREAK THEM OUT EARLIER? GAAAAAAAAH!
JUST KILL HIM, DAMMIT: 11
Karma looked at the two guns and became very angry,
William: *Winces* Yes, it must be humiliating, huh? To know that those two have been toying with you the entire fight. To know that they have superior weapons, but never bothered to use them, because they considered you so inferior. Or to know that you lost against two people so phenomenally stupid that they thought daggers were more lethal than guns.
though she knew that she couldn't do anything so she just sighed and raised her hands.
Brian: EVERY SINGLE ONE. EVERY SINGLE GODDAMNED PERSON WHO HAS EVER JOINED DAVID OR EVEN AGREED TO HELP HIM HAS BEEN FORCED TO DO SO THROUGH SUPERIOR FIREPOWER. EVERY SINGLE GODDAMNED MOTHERFUCKING ONE.
*Deflates* Look, all of us have ranted extensively on why this is the most fucked up thing ever. I’m not going to repeat all that here. I just don’t have the energy anymore. Please. If you don’t know why this is screwed up, then seek help.
William: You should be able to tell, though, just by looking at how closely this lines resembles lines in rape fantasies.
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 30
SOCIOPATHY: 30
"Okay...I give."
William: You shouldn’t have done that. It’s much better to be shot in the head then stuck under David’s command, I can assure you.
Brian: God, it makes me mad to think how utterly broken this woman has become in the span of half a chapter. Stuthor, there is a REASON why women avoid you in real life. And it’s not because they need to be taught their place.
YOU SEXIST BASTARD: 31
"Looks like we got a ship you guys." Chase smiled
Brian: No, you didn’t. She said that she had to see your worthiness. Riru and Kit may have shown her their worthiness, but you didn’t. All you did was sit to the side and gawp. That does not worthiness make.
William: What, do you want the poor woman beat up even more?
Brian: Look at these guys! If she had even a single brain cell, she wouldn’t be hurt at all!
as he carried an injured David on his back.
Brian: What, he’s so injured that he can’t freaking walk now? Dude, he’s survived being stabbed with SWORDS six fucking times! A bit of alcohol on open wounds would hardly hurt him! They just sting a bit, whereas being stabbed tend to make you bleed quite a lot.
William: And David was injured throughout the last two chapters! He always had those injuries! If anything, they should be less severe now, since they’ve had a bit of time to heal! If he can’t even walk now, then what the FUCK was the doing fighting Karma in the last chapter?
FAUX MADE OF IRON: 6
"Seems like." Avery agreed.
Brian: WE KNOW HE AGREED. What is this sentence even doing here? Is it important at all? Does it tell us fucking ANYTHING? NO! And you’d rather be writing shit like this than describing the actions in a freaking action scene?
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"Alright let's go!" David pointed onwards.
"You're awake, I can take you off my back then."
Brian: He was SLEEPING? He was SLEEPING immediately after being punched in the nuts? Stuthor, groin attacks jokes are some of the most frequently made jokes in fiction! I’m sure you would have figured out by now that being punched there would REALLY FUCKING HURT! AND PEOPLE DON’T FALL ASLEEP WHEN THEY’RE IN HORRIBLE AMOUNTS OF PAIN!
William: And if Chase thought David was asleep, then why didn’t he just wake him up? He just has to kick the guy in the ribs a few times! It’s surely a lot easier than carrying someone the same size and weight as you on your back! Particularly when you’re injured too, from a previous fight!
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 32
"I was never asleep."
Brian: (David) I was just riding on your back to show you your place.
William: (David) Because that’s what crews are for, don’t you know? They’re there to wipe your ass for you, take responsibility for your crap, and pamper you like a baby.
SOCIOPATHY: 31
"Then get off!" Chase barked as he tossed David on the ground.
Brian: I have no idea why you would even let him ride on your bad if he’s actually asleep. Like William said, why don’t you just wake him?
William: You know, these idiotic slapstick moments which are horribly out of character even for these cardboard cut-outs are quickly becoming the most amusing parts of the story, just because of how satisfying it is to see the Stu get hurt. THAT SHOULD TELL YOU SOMETHING, STUTHOR.
"Gawd! What did I do wrong?" David complained after all the times he had been injured.
Brian: If you can’t take this much crap, then you probably shouldn’t be a pirate. HE TOSS YOU TO THE GROUND FROM HIS BACK! The worst that could have happened is you bounced your head off the ground! Did you see the utter crap every single one of the Straw Hats had to go through? Did you see what Luffy does to his own body in order to protect his crew? If you can’t handle this, what makes you think you can handle becoming the fucking PIRATE KING?
William: And STOP FUCKING ASKING THAT QUESTION! Every time you repeat it just makes me want to kill your Avatar even more! At time point, a list of atrocities that he HASN’T committed would be shorter! Face it, Stuthor, you CANNOT write a character which hasn’t done anything wrong since the start of the story. Having characters say things like that is just asking for the wrath of the readers. SOMETHING YOU ALREADY HAVE IN ABUNDANCE, YOU UTTER MORON!
SOCIOPATHY: 32
FAUX MADE OF IRON: 7
A few minutes later...
Brian: If it’s just a few fucking minutes, then why bother with a time skip? I’m sure you can think up of SOMETHING to pass a few fucking minutes! Miniscule time skips like this just make your story even more jarring, because such short time periods are NEVER skipped!
William: And if you absolutely HAVE to have a time skip, because your molecule-sized brain simply cannot come up with a way for five fucking people to pass a few minutes, then at least mark it different from the rest of your narration! You used italics earlier in the fic! STICK with the formatting! Not only is consistency good, but differentiating time skips from normal narration will make the thing a whole lot less confusing! This isn’t just story writing basics, this is COMMON SENSE!
Brian: Well…that explains why he didn’t italicise the time skip, doesn’t it?
TOO DUMB TO LIVE: 33
"Wow, so this is the ship..." David said in awe.
Brian: (David) I never thought ships could be pineapple-shaped…
"Yeah I kind of based it off of Whitebeards Moby Dick." Karma looked on
Brian: YOU DID WHAT? YOU DID FUCKING WHAT?
The Voice: Ahem. Considering my superior skill with bullet points, I demand priority ranting rights.
- HOW would a random shipwright from a remote island in the middle of fucking nowhere know what Whitebeard’s ship is like? His ship would have been made and destroyed in the Grand Line. How the hell would a random girl who’s never been to the Grand Line, much less actually seen the ship, know what it looks like?
- Whitebeard’s ship was GIGANTIC, okay? How the hell did one shipwright manage to scour up enough resources to build it with absolutely no sponsors? How could she afford the materials? How did she get that much time? What job did she have that would allow her to work on a gigantic ship?
- Whitebeard’s ship was GIGANTIC, okay? If the protagonists were close enough to get there within a few minutes, they would have SEEN it! Especially when David outright said that they were right by the sea.
- What did Karma build this ship for? She’s not using it for fishing. She’s not using it for transportation. What inspired her to take on such a huge project? Did she get a premonition that the Stu will visit her one day and demand a ship, and therefore built is especially for him? YOUCANNOT DO THAT, STUTHOR! Characters cannot just CONVENIENT do whatever they need to, to get the plot to move along!
- Whitebeard’s ship was GIGANTIC, okay? It was designed to accommodate HUNDREDS if not thousands of people. Therefore, it was designed for a large crew. It would probably need a few dozen men just to maintain the sails! How the HELL is a six people crew going to manage such a large ship? There is no way they’ll ever get enough manpower to sail it! That’s why the Straw Hat Pirates started off with a small ship! Because they had a small crew!
- The marines still exist in this universe. Why would you base your ship off someone VERY well-known for being a pirate and passionate hater of the world government? She wasn’t actually a pirate. She had no one to back her up. If the marines took her project as a sign of rebellion, she is toast. The marines had excellently engineered ships as well. Why would she do something as risky as replicating the ship of one of the most famous pirates that ever lived?
- Not even a few weeks into their career as pirates, the Stus already have a ship that probably took Whitebeard a few decades to earn. All for nothing. CAN YOU GET MORE STUISH THAN THAT?
as the large boat made everyone's jaws drops.
Brian: EVERYONE admires it? No one points out the inefficiencies in having such a large ship for a meagre six people crew? Really? Dear God, even the SHIP is a Sue!
William: Well, of course it has to be amazing and jaw-dropping, since it belongs to the protagonist. Anything less is just plain unacceptable. I guess this also tells us why he abandoned his two former boats, even though they apparently worked wonderfully for him. They just weren’t good enough. Only the ships of the most famous pirates will ever do for someone as illustrious as our dear protagonist here.
…
I think I just vomited in my mouth. It was a very strange experience.
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