FANFIC: WRITTEN IN BLOOD

[sourpony]

Title: Written in Blood
Fandom: Once Upon a Time
Characters: Ruby/August
Prompt: A Song [written in blood/she wants revenge]
Word Count: 746
Rating: PG13 [implied sexuality]

Comments

[faeriesfolly]

♥

couple little things I saw (can't turn off editor mode) if you want to know.

[sourpony]

[faeriesfolly]

lol. I have such beer goggles when it comes to editing my own things...that it takes over when I read things I did not write. :P

brb.

[sourpony]

same here.

[faeriesfolly]

There wasn't much time for niceities (<---niceties. one of the silliest spellings ever.)

her chest and legs tangled up in the sheets. (<----her chest and her legs. possibly their legs, but her and her is more parallel.)

lap - just a delivery, she had been given to accomplish became so much more as her red nails trailed down his back. (<---- lap. It was just a delivery she had been given to accomplish.../ lap. The delivery she had been given to accomplish... bit of a run on. I am so bad about these.)

reminding her she where she was as she straighten her uniform (<----reminding her where she was as she straightened.... I also think mega watt is megawatt.)

eyes kept guarded (maybe "were kept guarded" when I "hear it" in my head it flows better? idek.)

everywhere else (everything works better. everyone and everything, but her)

breath, cursing mentally at not making the knots too tight, for not leaving his shirt unripped, and trying (<--- breathe, cursing mentally for having not made the knots too tight, having left his

[sourpony]

Thank you ♥