from shitty slam poem to awkward prose in thirty seconds flat!

[spinningdizzy]

so, i tried this as a slam(ish) poem, but judging by audience reaction i should probably shelve it. however, i write so rarely that trashing anything would make me convulse (or at least whimper), so i tried to slightly rework it into very short prose. please let me know if i should try to put it back in poem form, continue trying to make it prose

Comments

[perihelia]

either way, it's amusing. :) you have a great sense of humor.

[girlnamedjames]

i really liked it. i miss writing creatively. i should start doing that again.

finally you post something

[anonymous]

i check this thing daily and frankly, youre boring me with your one post every two weeks. POST MORE HOEBAG! love love.

bee teee dubb

[anonymous]

its mer

[narniacleo]

meh, i've never been great with slampoetry, sara, but you are queen. i don't know how they could not have received it well! as prose it works, though i haven't seen it in poetry form.