Comments | spoons1899: Fic: Autumn

spoons1899

Fic: Autumn

Aug 04, 2010 02:13

Title: Autumn
Characters/Pairing: Sam, Dean, Sam/OFC
Rating: PG
Word Count: ~5,000
Summary: Sam meets a girl at school and gets a taste of an entirely different kind of family life, one that makes him start to question his own. Pre-series.

( Dean tells him he’s a freak but Dean’s a summer boy )

pre-series, supernatural, dean, my fic, sam

Comments 31

callistosh65 August 4 2010, 08:21:37 UTC

So, so good. You captured all the angst and yearning in pre-series Sam just perfectly. Loved the way you wrote the idea of 'his world' and 'her world' - and your description of Dean in his was gorgeous.

He doesn’t know what to think about watching Caty swirl through her house of siblings, laughing and talking and arguing, but never once looking at any of them like they’re her world. That's the last line, but the whole paragraph was breathtaking.

spoons1899 August 4 2010, 20:02:21 UTC

Thank you very much! This was my first real foray into pre-series, and it started out with the idea of being just a cute little Sam-and-a-first-crush kind of story, but then of course the angst just could not be denied. :)

tifaching August 4 2010, 10:37:24 UTC

That was gorgeous. You perfectly captured adolescent Sam. I especially loved the way you worked in the seasons. Summer for Dean, autumn for Sam and then the bleak deadness of winter. No spring, because new life and hope don't apply to the Winchesters. This was so well done, thanks for sharing!

spoons1899 August 4 2010, 20:03:04 UTC

Thank you!

No spring, because new life and hope don't apply to the Winchesters Haha, it's so sad that that is so true.

kassidy62 August 4 2010, 11:53:19 UTC

love this. Your young Sam, I love him, and I love those moments between him and Dean, like where he tells Dean to go back and aim for the girls who made fun of him.

love this line: *He hates that for every sunny day in the summer when Dean is laughing and waxing his car there’s a day like this in the winter, where Sam is trying not to cry and Dad with cuts still fresh on his face pushes the petal to the floor.*

okay, I said love enough, but still. I do.

spoons1899 August 4 2010, 20:04:37 UTC

Thank you! Feel feel to sat love as much as you want :) I'm glad the young Sam worked, I always feel a little less sure of his voice than Dean's.

kassidy62 August 4 2010, 20:08:14 UTC

I've been reading some of your other stuff. Amazing. The short storm story, God, the description and feeling are so lovely, Dean's dread, the pretty and the wildness that is Sam, standing and awaiting his fate, almost. You are very talented.

wave_obscura August 4 2010, 14:23:42 UTC

STUNNING. It's too early in the morning to say anything more intelligent. So I'll just repeat:

STUNNING.

spoons1899 August 4 2010, 20:05:02 UTC

Haha, well that word is saying plenty. Thank you!

borgmama1of5 August 4 2010, 15:39:57 UTC

This was just exquisite!

You captured Sam's conflicting needs exactly perfect, in a way that illuminates his future decisions so clearly.

This is the most perfect explanation of how Sam's character was formed that I have ever read!

spoons1899 August 4 2010, 20:06:04 UTC

Wow, thank you very much! I always feel a little disconnected from Sam, even though I adore him, sometimes it's a real struggle getting inside his head. I'm glad it worked here!