Cool. I like being reviewed by a serial killer ;) I like the last one best as well. Though, living on the east coast U.S., I like the snow bit. The snow where I live just pisses me off. It really is bulletproof.
I am always lost for words when I first read what you have written. I need to go away and think and digest - I do not have a quick mind - and then come back later with something worthwhile to say. I hope. But in the meantime I wanted you to know that I have been here ..
Hey... so, I wanted to play a bit with double meaning. Could you feel it? The vest is supposed to be bullet proof but he taps his heart. The snow may be bulletproof but his luck isn't... he's drunk so he's bulletproof or maybe it's who came to take him home that makes him feel that way... I'm such a kid with these things. I jot them down then I wonder how they feel to read...
Yes, you made the double meaning - the allegory - quite plainly. He has less-than-perfect confidence in the vest's ability to protect him ... it still leaves him vulnerable to a fatal shot to the head, or the groin, or maybe he is thinking of the character in Romeo & Juliet who dies after an almost unnoticed sword thrust under his arm and into his lung.
Goren being Goren, he is just itching to test the old adage about bullets bouncing off snow. A younger, rasher Goren might even have found a way to try the experiment. Knowing that he has grown up and become a fuddy-duddy (~giggle~) probably pisses him off even more.
Enough alcohol can make almost anyone feel invincible. But i have to admit that I MISSED the point that it may have been Eames (?) coming to take him home that also filled him with such strength, because I was still concentrating on the alcohol. So, you could signpost that more for the reader (or any rate for me) if you wanted to.
PS - how did it feel to read it? Like climbing under a warm set of covers on a cold, cold evening ... when there's nothing on TV and everyone else has gone out or is asleep.
PPS - somewhere else you asked me whether or not I disliked Chris Noth or just Logan ... the answer is, I have started watching Logan episodes and am enjoying them in the same way as I enjoy other shows that are not Goren and Eames. I think Noth is great! I also like Nicholson. She's lovely. I hate to think what is going to happen to them at the end of season six, though.
Thanks. I can't seem to resist a prompt. It works it's way into my brain and mixes itself with Bobby.
I'm still thinking about your sitting phase. You know - the things I write and let sit are the things I rarely post. It's as if they become too personal to me after a while, too private. So, mostly I write and post fairly quickly. A sitting phase... hmmm.
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I like the last one best, probably because you and I think similarly. Nice work as always.
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I like the last one best as well.
Though, living on the east coast U.S., I like the snow bit. The snow where I live just pisses me off. It really is bulletproof.
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Goren being Goren, he is just itching to test the old adage about bullets bouncing off snow. A younger, rasher Goren might even have found a way to try the experiment. Knowing that he has grown up and become a fuddy-duddy (~giggle~) probably pisses him off even more.
Enough alcohol can make almost anyone feel invincible. But i have to admit that I MISSED the point that it may have been Eames (?) coming to take him home that also filled him with such strength, because I was still concentrating on the alcohol. So, you could signpost that more for the reader (or any rate for me) if you wanted to.
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PPS - somewhere else you asked me whether or not I disliked Chris Noth or just Logan ... the answer is, I have started watching Logan episodes and am enjoying them in the same way as I enjoy other shows that are not Goren and Eames. I think Noth is great! I also like Nicholson. She's lovely. I hate to think what is going to happen to them at the end of season six, though.
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I'm still thinking about your sitting phase. You know - the things I write and let sit are the things I rarely post. It's as if they become too personal to me after a while, too private. So, mostly I write and post fairly quickly. A sitting phase... hmmm.
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