FIC: Part 2 - Demand

[starfirefic]

Title: Part 2 - Demand
Author: starfirefic
Fandom: Torchwood
Characters: Owen, Jack
Word Count: ~2,000ish
Genre: Kink, pure and simple (oh, alright, there may be some character stuff in there too)
Rating: Definite NC-17
Beta: The incomparable riftugee (without whom there'd be a lot more monologue, and a lot less Jacktion)

Author's Notes:Written as the second part of

Comments

[coffeegirl18]

Love that Jack has one of those necklaces oh and...

*thud*

[starfirefic]

Heh... I was discussing it with my beta, and we figured that if Mary's people used the necklaces to communicate, they were probably as common for them as cellphones are for us. So from that point of view, it wouldn't be totally unlikely for Jack to have not only seen one before, but picked one up.

And of course, if he had the means avaialable to find out what was causing an issue that was endangering his team, of course he'd use it. The concept of sitting Owen down and asking him what the problem was first, though... somehow I'm not seeing that occurring to him ;-)

[anonymous]

...Wow!

Jack's character was so brutal, so.. perfect! You write him so well!
Came across part one on the kink meme, and squee-ed when I saw there was another part!

Please, oh pretty, pretty please, write more?

[starfirefic]

*grins* - thank you for the feedback - and yes, there will probably be a part 3, if time, study and muses allow

[pandatini]

nuu!!! it can't end there~!

“Yes. Yes I did.” Jack glanced up at last, the slightest hint of a knowing glint in his eyes that did… uncomfortable… things to the pit of Owen’s stomach. “Show me your hands, Owen,” he said, conversationally.

Guh. This line did ...uncomfortable ...things to my girly bits.

“Show me,” Jack repeated, his voice hardening just the tiniest, tiniest fraction, “your hands. Now.”

double guh.

And, God, Owen couldn’t help the gasp that escaped then.

guuuuuuuuuuuuuuh ... for some reason, this line struck me as ~~incredibly~~ in character, and so very hot. I could ~picture~ Burn Gorman doing that on screen ... mmm, how I wish we could get the actors to act this whole thing out ... *drools*

So crashing to his knees wasn’t a choice. Not really. Choice wasn’t an option the fiery torrent had left him. Kneeling there - eyes level with the buckle of Jack’s belt, want and lust a hot copper tang at the back of his dessicated throat - was nothing more or less than an inevitability.Guuuuuuuuuuh ... oh Jack's belt

[starfirefic]

Wow - thank you so much for the long comment, and letting me know the things that worked for you in here

[pandatini]

Heh... I originally had the bit about there being lines Jack wouldn't cross as him saying "I left the days when I'd force myself on the genuinely unwilling behind me a long time ago" because it sounded threatening in my mind, but my lovely beta pointed out that it made Jack sound like a recovering rapist, and that wasn't *really* the image I had in mine for him,

Heh, the funny thing is, on first read-through that line *doesn't* strike me as Jack being a recovering rapist ... but maybe that's because I have a dub-con/non-con kink in fanfic. I guess it just goes to prove different things strike people in different ways.

Anyway, you're welcome ;)

[unfeathered]

Okay. I found time. *g*

And... guh. This. Is. HOT.

Very, very hot. Not to mention extremely well-written. Put the two of those together, and, well, you have a new fan. :-)

(And if you want to read some well-written BDSM stuff, may I recommend becky_writing's stuff? She really does know what she's talking about and she's an awesome writer.)

[starfirefic]

*grins widely* - thank you so much for the compliment (and coming from you, it really does mean a lot!), and I'm grateful you found the time - real-life can be a demanding whatsit at times!

I'm glad you enjoyed it and found it hot. I definitely found it hot to write (although I went back through it, and I was kind of amazed to realise how little actually happened outside of Owen's brain in it over the course of the 2,000 odd words.

And yep, I've read a number of becky_writing's things: she's kind of who the fangirl ficwriter in me wants to be when I grow up, although it's a long, long road from here to there (if it's not going to embarrass you horribly, when I mentioned you were one of the writers whose stuff I had a huge amount of respect for? Becky was kind of the other one...). I think I may need to go back and read them again though.

Purely in the name of research, of course...

[unfeathered]

First of all, brain-stuff is good. Often, the hottest stuff isn't all about actual sex and all the trappings, it's the preliminary stuff, all the possibilities that might come from it, and the interaction between the two people. I love this sort of thing.

Secondly, wow. Becky's very much my hero too so to be mentioned on her kind of level is. Yeah. Wow. :-)

(Yeah, a little embarrassed. But still very, very nice to hear. Thank you!)

[invisible_lift]

I think I may love your Jack more than a little. More like a lot. Guh.

[starfirefic]

*grins* - he's not a very nice Jack, is he? But he really does have his appeal.

Glad you're enjoying him - thanks so much for commenting and letting me know :-)

[invisible_lift]

I don't need nice. After reading that, I need either a cold shower or a whipping.

Maybe both.

Actually, let's go with both.

[starfirefic]

*grins*

Now why does that comment bring Jack's belt buckle to mind.

Oh, god, I think we have the beginnings of Part 3.

*GUH*