When "brown" just isn't good enough.

[stinky_horowitz]

Comments

[kita_the_spaz]

I know that's not me, though I think I may have referred to the color of his eyes as chocolate brown once... or was it bark-brown? ~is confused and wanders off to recheck Mission's Gift~

[stinky_horowitz]

No, it wasn't you. And really, everybody uses it to describe Iruka. That's fine by me. But using it every 1,100 words in one story is kinda excessive. Normally, I wouldn't even mention it, but the rest of his/her writing is SO GOOD. Every time I read "chocolate" after they use it once, I think "you're better than this, c'mon." They could branch out to texture, or scent, or expression and not rely on color if they need a modifier for his hair and eyes.

[kita_the_spaz]

Oh... ~was a little scared there~

Well, I try to use different adjectives.

Which fic? Not sure if I've read it. Link me?

[ranty_rie]

Personally? The one that gets me is "sable".

I had to look it up, because I kept imagining Iruka's head covered in sharp blades. And wincing at the thought of Kakashi running his fingers through it. (...OW.)

I don't think a specific adjective is worng, per se, it's just the constant, unrelenting repetition, ne? XD At least that's what grates my nerves.

[stinky_horowitz]

Yeah. It was totally the repetition. For me, chocolate becomes more of a food and less of a color the more times you say it.