Hang on to past tense tonight

[subtleslide]

| Hang on to past tense tonight | pg | super junior | kyuhyun/sungmin | 2033w |

It was hard to remember the exact sequence of events, but he’d be damned if he didn’t at least try.

Notes: Written for the melodicword challenge. Prompt: "sequence"

Comments

[pakkuman]

This fic made me use my brain and think all the way through it (that's a good thing). I think I've read it about three times

This is very well written

It’s hard to remember the exact sequence of events, but he’ll be damned if he doesn’t at least try.
♥

[subtleslide]

Haha, it does seem to require a few more readings than the usual fic. Not sure if that's a good thing though! :X

Thank you very much!

[thundersquall]

I - I can't ;; BREAK MY HEART OVER AND OVER, WHY DON'T YOU :'DDD

Plot (and omg Sungmin dying ;; he DID die, right, sobs) aside, I really really LOVED the way you wrote this - the style is so different, so new, but you make it work so well when in the hands of a lesser writer it would have been disastrous. It totally helped with the general mood of the fic - like how Kyuhyun's thoughts are all so jumbled, and then the transition between tenses - it just helped to create such a surreal, dream-like, weaving-in-and-out-of-reality kind of feel. I AM JELLY OF YOUR SKILLZ ;; Loved this so much, I'm memming it. ♥

[subtleslide]

Um, he's not dead. Just...not breathing? Hold still while I patch you back up (with yewon honeymoon fic ok? ok.)

aljsf thank you bb ;_; I was definitely trying something new and I'm glad it worked! \o/ I was afraid it would be too confusing and headache inducing because it doesn't really make sense on the first read-through >:

♥ ♥ ♥ iluuuu.

[numbuh_009]

This is a freaking masterpiece. I was confused the first time I read it, but the beauty of this really lies in the shifts of perception. Kyuhyun's thoughts are so jumbled that initially, everything seems normal, but as the story progresses, there's just a nagging feeling that something is very wrong. I like how you did not state outright what was wrong at the end, how Kyuhyun's figurative sight remains kind of impaired (and that repetition of the first line at the every end TT_TT). I bow to your skills.

[subtleslide]

Thank you so much! I'm blushing really hard right now because I'm super happy you've picked up on everything I was trying to do with this story. When I saw the prompt I got the idea to write an out-of-sequence story that will still (kind of) make sense, and I think it mostly worked? Haha XD I'm glad you liked it! ♥

[swshawnee]

WAH!
The ending really took my by surprise...
I loved the whole thing because it's very different and it seemed very real, but OH MY GOD SUNGMIN CANNOT BE DEAD DDDDDD:
...anyways xD I really loved this and I have a feeling I'll be back to reread it many times... ^_^
<3 to you!

[swshawnee]

me by* surprise T_T damn you typos, I will get you one day

[subtleslide]

Haha, that's alright. I'm the queen to typos xD

I'm glad you liked it! Thank you :)

[tokkei_12]

UWAH, THAT WAS SO EFFIN' AMAZING :D :D :D The contrast between the neatly numbered 'sequential' events and the overall 'What the heck is going on?' feeling was incredibly lovely, made all the more wonderful with the (upon retrospect) painful humor that is Kyuhyun's thinking process. And ending with the starting sentence made this complete and totally perfect. Sungmiiiiiiin, why didn't you look at the traffic? *sobbing*

But this was brilliantly done, and I loved it very much! &hearts &hearts &hearts

[subtleslide]

because he was distracted ;___;

thank you! i'm really glad you liked it! :DDD