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first impressions 6 anonymous November 6 2006, 01:22:26 UTC
Another fun chapter! It was nice to see Lee enjoy himself--he's always so controlled.

I can so see him being the "man of the house" when his father left. He has that sense of responsibility.

I like Zak here, too. The show never told us what he was like, but knowing how Lee is, I can see Zak being the opposite--just like you wrote him here.

Another great chapter. Looking forward to chapter 7!

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Re: first impressions 6 suffolkgirl November 6 2006, 11:15:52 UTC
Another fun chapter! It was nice to see Lee enjoy himself--he's always so controlled.

It's nice to write them having fun for a change. They can do it - spraying each other with water hoses in Colonial Day for example.

And I did try to make Lee a bit more relaxed in this story as at this point he doesn't have all the baggage - Zak's death, being in love with his brother's fiancee etc - that he acquires later.

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jatnj November 6 2006, 02:04:44 UTC
I realized I was smiling about halfway through this chapter and consciously tried to stop but couldn't. I would give anything to see L/K play their way through an arcade for real.

Such an entertaining chapter. I hope Lee doesn't make a big stink out of this too. He already ruined the party with the tempter tantrum over his father.

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suffolkgirl November 6 2006, 11:25:59 UTC
I would give anything to see L/K play their way through an arcade for real.

So would I!

The arcade just seemed to fit their competitiveness, plus it was a way to get them to fly vipers together despite the problem of there being no actual vipers around.

I hope Lee doesn't make a big stink out of this too. He already ruined the party with the tempter tantrum over his father.

No comment! :-)

But Lee's protective older brother mode was definitely kicking into gear at the end here...

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etilia76 December 20 2006, 10:22:57 UTC
I really like this pre-mini fic, it was fun to see them enjoying themselves. Now I can't stop reading - I just have to know what happens next and if they will have a huge fight about the fact that Kara is Zak's teacher...or if he learns to deal with it...

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i_am_girlfriday January 1 2007, 16:55:35 UTC
Dude!!! This was such a fun chapter! I totally apologize for pumping your inbox full of silly comments, but I'm squeeing with delight!!!!!!

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suffolkgirl January 1 2007, 17:11:22 UTC
Don't apologise, I'm enjoying reading them! It's nice to write them having fun for a change.

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mlsky April 16 2007, 15:35:21 UTC
GAH! This is wonderful. The competitive nature of Lee/Kara and how she actually ENJOYS competing with him is awesome. And the reveal about Kara being Zak's instructor is a nice little wrinkle.

I can't wait to see how it plays out.

*runs off to read*

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