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sunflower1343

[fic] VF drabble: A moment in Time

Feb 18, 2007 14:43

VF Drabble: A Moment in Time
Pairing: Asami x Akihito
Rating: R

Note: I'm trying to put the finishing touches on a Feilong and Mikhail story, but I was out driving this afternoon and the glittery ice covered trees and blue skies brought this scene to mind, so I came home and wrote it down. I'll probably share it with the comm's later.

( A Moment in Time )

takaba, asami

Comments 72

ynm February 18 2007, 20:07:42 UTC

Wow, never occured to me to extrapolate the meaning of Asami making sure Akihito comes first could mean that Akihito's needs are always first with Asami.

Very powerful line indeed. Much shorter than the usual but the feelings that come with it have not been diminished in any way. ^_^

sunflower1343 February 23 2007, 04:25:19 UTC

Thank you. It's a little thing, but it just wouldn't leave me alone, so I had to put it down on the page. ^_^

sirius_fasha February 18 2007, 20:10:30 UTC

awwww... it's sooooo sweet. i definitely enjoyed reading this! thanx a lot for sharing! ^________^

sunflower1343 February 23 2007, 04:25:45 UTC

Thank you! *hugs*

kodoku_megumi February 18 2007, 20:11:59 UTC

Oh Asami, you always have to be the one in control aren't you? But that aside it was simply beautiful. Plus it was a nice, little winter-substitute for me as well, coz we missed it this year ^^"

"Akihito first. Always first."
*staring dreamy eyed at the monitor*

thanks for sharing <333!!

sunflower1343 February 23 2007, 04:27:00 UTC

No winter? We got whomped. And it's so lovely out, except when you go get mail in your slippers. -____-; *not recommended*

But thank you so much!

pugsley February 18 2007, 20:25:08 UTC

What a lovely winter scene story!! I love being in the country when there is snow on the ground. It is always so pristine and in a way innocent, like an angel. That is how I think of Akihito and I believe that is what Asami sees in him as well and may be one of the reasons why he continues going after him!! In Akihito he can feel pure, away from the "ugliness" that surrounds him in his day-to-day life.

Asami has a great desire to control everyone and even their emotions. He thrives when he is affecting those around him, especially Akihito. You did really well at portraying that!!

Even though Asami and Akihito did not have "sex" per se, your story was very sexy and brought out wonderful emotions in me and especially great memories of being in the woods during winter time!! Thank you for sharing another wonderful story!!

sunflower1343 February 23 2007, 04:35:17 UTC

I have to drive to see pristine snow because of dog poop. ^^; But a few blocks away it's just lovely. XDD

But last weekend, all the trees on our street were coated with ice, and just glittered in the sun against a bright blue sky. It was like a fairy tale, so pretty.

Aki is like that, bright and pretty and pure. and Asami is the dog poop no, no XD, though I wonder if he ever feels that way. I think he does, and is aware of it, yet takes Aki anyway because there's nothing else like that in his life.

I'm very happy that you enjoyed this. Thank you!

lady75 February 18 2007, 20:35:35 UTC

such a sweet one ^^
I like the fact that you pictured them as a Couple..
And Asami being soo sweet

sunflower1343 February 23 2007, 04:36:32 UTC

I hadn't thought of that, but they were a couple here weren't they? I like that too, and will have to try to write more stories reflecting that. :) Thank you.