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szaleniec1000

Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 8

Jul 22, 2014 23:43

This chapter is titled "The Milk of Life", and not since Chapter 22 of Too Exposed was called "Joining" have I been more disturbed by a chapter title.

( Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 8 )

show don't tell, google is your friend, a description would be nice, salazar is evil, badfic:hogwarts overexposed, conflict be damned, department of redundancy department, expospeak, thirty contrivance pileup, pov!fail, welsh railway, are you a witch or not, sexism, priorities be damned, the worst birthday, mione my arse, hermione in name only, nudity for everyone, hooch is evil, you fail paediatrics forever, disembodied dialogue, ineffectual villainy, convention of the psychics, brain bleach, harry potter, dialogue is not narration, continuity isn't optional, education system from hell, breast fixation, anticlimax

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sickbritkid2 July 26 2014, 06:12:38 UTC

She knew immediately what she wanted for dinner. So anyway, we get a flashback.

I'm guessing you're getting all the nipple references as you can out before Hooch dies?

sickbritkid2 July 26 2014, 06:15:18 UTC

It’s not a sexy or a pretty picture, but rather gross, almost deformed in appearance.

Okay, Neil, sure. I'd sooner feast on my own balls than believe that tripe...

sickbritkid2 July 26 2014, 07:44:11 UTC

"Howled" as a dialogue tag doesn't say "don't fuck with this person", unless they're a werewolf.

No kidding. If anything, howl as a dialogue tag is oftentimes used for comedic pain or something of that nature. So Neil is, once again, shooting himself in the foot with his Said Bookisms...

sickbritkid2 July 26 2014, 07:48:02 UTC

Why Jamie, Caitlin and Emily were missing was supposed to be a complete secret, so, naturally the whole school knew about it.

T_T

Fuck you, Neil.

sickbritkid2 July 26 2014, 07:50:35 UTC

The first of what I hope will be many such events that will strengthen our binds with our American cousins.

PLOT TWIST: They're all nudists!

szaleniec1000 July 26 2014, 11:55:36 UTC

At least one of them is.