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[talkstocoyotes]

NOTE: This isn't the last completed chapter. There's a glitch on the next page that makes it display as "No Entry," but Chapter 21 is at http://talkstocoyotes.livejournal.com/6434.html and Chapter 22 at http://talkstocoyotes.livejournal.com/6843.html

Chapter 20

The attic room was short and narrow, its sparse furnishings hinting that it hadn’t been

Comments

[njayc]

I finally got caught up & was so pleased to see another chapter posted just yesterday with more to come soon. The scene switching between Ennis semi-conscious & David's chat with Maggie was very effective. Glad that Maggie agreed Jack was a looker even in his latest incarnation! Now it could get "interesting" with Ennis all set up ready to begin a new phase: all the pieces are lined up, how will it play out?
I'd like to see how Jack reacts to Ennis's new situation to. The repeated asking of "do you love me?" drew to mind Jesus asking his disciples of their trust.
I hope Ennis gets on with Maggie ok. Maybe he will confide in her. Not long til we find out :)

[talkstocoyotes]

"The repeated asking of 'do you love me?' drew to mind Jesus asking his disciples of their trust."

Hey, someone finally spotted that connection! It's from John 21:15-70.

(verse 70) He said to him the third time, 'Simon, son of John, do you love me?' Peter was grieved because he said to him the third time, "Do you love me?" And he said to him, 'Lord, You know all things; you know that I love you.' Jesus said to him, 'tend my sheep."

The conventional interpretation of that is that basically Jesus is charging Peter to go out and get converts and establish a religious institution. My own take on it is that he's telling Peter to take the love that he's reaffirmed (after denying it three times) for his beloved and holy teacher and carry that out into the world.

This isn't any suggestion of Jack as a Jesus figure; but he's doing much the same thing. Ennis is being given a chance to affirm what he'd been denying for so long.

Thanks for reading! Ennis will get along with Maggie, but needless to say he'll have a lot to adjust to.

[valleyview]

Hi Marcia: I too am so glad to have your story back. This is a very interesting, moody chapter, extremely well-written.

[mariska_to]

I like this chapter very much. Definitely worth the wait, and then some :) It is so well written, and the pace feels organic to Ennis. He may be getting acquainted with his new home in "Ennis speed," but he notices all the important things and makes the right connections.

Am delighted another chapter is coming soon :)

[his_mockingbird]

Really glad to see this story updated! I've always enjoyed reading it. And this chapter was so well written, I can't wait to see what happens next. =)

Gift of Exile

[cwby30]

Evenin'.

Well, glad to see another chapter up. Your story of Ennis finding a new place, away from his comfort zone, moving on in his life, has always been a special one to me. I always thought that Ennis had that capacity, as long as the circumstances were right, and here they are.

The pictures are intriguing, telling Ennis that David has something powerful happen in his life, too, that is partly hidden but partly waiting and wanting to be found and understood by the proper person. The Phoenix rising from the ashes of his own destruction, and the graveyard from which none arise except on the last day. David and ...? When can they find the proper time to confide all in each other?

Can only wish Ennis the best now. Know Jack is around, and Jack knows that one of Ennis' new acquaintances can see him. Both circumstances will be interesting and helpful to Ennis, I'm sure.

Thanks again.

Re: Gift of Exile

[cwby30]

Evenin', again.

Well, would you add me to your "friends" list? I aim to do that now, too. Would keep me Aware even sooner when you post.

Thanks again.