Writing Prompts - #84 - Write a story starting with the first line in a Nursery rhyme
Monday's Child is fair of face
Monday's child is fair of face as she walks slowly to school because she's got a secret that nobody knows. Today will be the day she tells all of the people in her class that she has something to say. She's been working hard for many weeks now to make it perfect and to make sure every move is right Everyone at home ( Read more... )
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I was writing the last part and worrying if it had the same intensity as the beginning because I wrote them at different times. I'm glad that it turned out okay! Glad that you liked it!!
Nice icon, btw.
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It actually flows pretty nicely. I can't tell where you stopped or re-started writing it. If you're worried about the ending, I don't think it needs to be as intense, it's like a build-up & release of tension/energy that's been exhausted, I feel 'satisfied', like having had a meal. Does that make sense? Your climax, apex, whatever you want to call it, was the shooting, & since it's utilising the concept of nursery rhyme - I don't know if you did it on purpose, but it kind of runs, word-wise, like a nursery rhyme at that point. I like that. :) Your last 2 lines seal the deal. I think to do much more with that might be overkill (I do that a lot, ha ha). No pun intended. XD
Thanks; it was made by otsu.
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