[ fanfic ] : Useless : APH

[tekyfreakinator]

title: useless
fandom: Axis Powers Hetalia
characters/pairing: Swiss/Japan 
warnings: Lots of stuff implied. >>
quote: In the end, its just the talking that's useless.
notes: written for miyako_tsuki . It came out rather drabbley.

Comments

[sakuratsukikage]

This was amazing. This pairing isn't often written in the Western fandom, and it's nice to see it, as odd as their interactions and personalities can sometimes seen. You wrote them very well in tandem, and I loved the thematic elements you used to carry the fic along, the way you didn't distinguish between the two of them except through specific details, all of it. It sounded like the thoughts each of them might really have, similar and yet differentiated enough to fit their very different personalities. In other words, I really liked this--amazing job.

[isadorathegreat]

Oooooh, this is nice~ The atmosphere of the piece seems distant and intimate at the same time (definitely charged), and I like the flashbacks to Japan fighting and/or killing.

The only words that mean anything (‘you smell like ink’ and so much more) are spoken mouth-on-skin and through movement and touch.

This sentence? Kind of hot and the imagery is great. I think I'll take a peek at what else you have to offer. ;)

[tijuana_pirate]

Oh, very pretty. I read this once through quickly and then over again quite slowly. I loved how stripped down this fic was. There's so little in terms of the words you're choosing and the things you're choosing to describe. Given what you were talking about, it was, obviously, the perfect way to write this. ^^

I especially liked the little phrases in brackets. Seemed to parallel some of the themes in your story really nicely (the idea of the things behind what we're saying; behind your sentences, there are these little truths apart from the text. very pretty).

This story echoes, that's what I think. Because it's written so quietly, each little word seems to be larger than it should be. Stripping everything down makes it sound more true. Very pretty, like a said. )

-T. pirate