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[ogicsucks]

I've got this posted on my personal livejournal account, but though I'd post here as well. It IS slightly spoilerific, so I'm hiding it behind a cut. I welcome all comments and critiques, so feel free ;)

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[silenceandpsych]

*snrk* Too cute! I especially love the last line. And Mikaela's teasing Bumblebee, well, who wouldn't want to do that. ^-^

The only part I'm having a little bit of trouble with is Mikaela's jump from talking about spontaneity to asking about whether or not there are femmes. It seems a bit too abrupt there, and I can't really see how or why she shifted over to that topic. Perhaps if you put a break in the dialogue between those two sentences and explained why she thought to ask that question, it would flow more smoothly.

Or not. I dunno. ^^; Still, like I said, 'twas very cute.