Comments | the_valley_poet: Dear Jen,

the_valley_poet

Dear Jen,

May 02, 2005 00:19

This is a completly fictional writting which was inspired by Maury some tv show they had it on abusive husbands so i wrote it on this COMPLETLY FICTIONAL ( Read more... )

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Re; Dallas Poet anonymous May 2 2005, 16:58:54 UTC

VEry nice. Like what you did with the line breaks and I see youre really taking to heart and experimenting all the forms and techniques of the craft. Your on the right path my freind. OPen mind and open heart will get you far. Loved the first line. I would probably be careful using cliches like "maiden". Other than that good job! Love the themes in your work. Your definetly not self absorbed like most poets your age. Good social comentary. peace. ricardo

the_valley_poet May 4 2005, 03:37:52 UTC

Yes I am experimenting with differnt forms as well as points of view's. Glad I"m On the right path. I know what you mean about the cliche lines its because at first i was unsure what direction i wanted to take this in. And Thank You For Commenting

celticidal May 11 2005, 18:17:59 UTC

Quite cool Adrian. Another Twist ending.
Haven't talked to you in a while, but maybe I'll run into you at one of the future readings cuz my car is dead. Now doesn't that suck for me... hmm I should write a poem about my dead car. anyway, bye.

DALLAS POET anonymous May 16 2005, 14:06:54 UTC

Adrain

I will be in the valley this coming weekend, Saturday to be exact. Im doing a featured reading for Monica at AA cultural center Sat @ 8:30. Maybe ill see you there.
peace,
ricardo
ps. whats your email address?

the_valley_poet May 16 2005, 18:37:59 UTC

Yeah I'll Most Definetly Be There I Turn Out For Alot Of Events That They Have But I'll Be There Sat. And My Email Is Kiddflows@yahoo.com peace

DALLAS POET the_valley_poet May 16 2005, 19:15:15 UTC

Cool thats dope, try and invite as many poets and friends. I believe our buddy Amado will be thier too. See you thier,
peace,
ricardo