Bob and the Demon: The Visitor

[theanonymousx]

Bob stared out of the window of the apartment, a fear unlike any man has ever experienced gripped him and he had a full body shiver not unlike the one a person may experience when entering into a very haunted house. This apprehension wasn't caused by the 8-foot tall Australian-accented demon that he lived with, no, he'd become as used to that as

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[amanda6035]

okay, Ive read your stories before, and you have a wonderful imagination, and the ability to write in "another dialect" is damn cool.....

but I have such a hard time reading it! I get 3 lines into these and I'm like "damn, i cant understand I dont wanna read this anymore!" and it sucks cause I really do wanna read it cause its probably funny as hell, but I'm just damn impatient! ARG!

w00t

[theanonymousx]

Kewl, but which part be confusin'? I can imagine it'd be the psuedo-Aussie dialogue and if that is it, I can see where'd it'd be weird to look at on-screen/page. I'm pretty much trying to mentally channel the Croc Hunter (STEVE IRWIN! krikey!) when Percy talks and I bet there's a bit o' a breakdown when the stuff is read.
Then again, maybe the story is comin' out kinda disjointed and hard to follow? Lemme read through it and check it from other perspectives.

NE1 else notice this or wanna help me with it? I know phrakenstyne is a hellified writer and could lend me some tips *COUGH* HINT *COUGH*.

Re: w00t

[cjshrader]

I've had no problems at all. I'm a little confused on where she sees the problem, to be honest.

If it's the Australian thing, you need to read more books with Dwarves in them. They're always making up words, and it really helps to condition you to made up Australian words too.