FIC: Walk Through Hell

[thebubblyterror]

Title: Walk Through Hell - Prologue
Pairing: Demi Lovato/Selena Gomez
Summary: Angst. In the back of her mind, in that dark, secret place where she let her own insecurities roam unseen and unchecked, Selena knew that Demi would eventually move on without her.
Disclaimer: THEY ARE NOT MINE. OBVIOUSLY. THIS IS A WORK OF FICTION. If they were, sexy

Comments

[lastchance_197]

As an actress, Selena figured, she didn't really need a heart. After all, it'd been dragging behind Demi's tour bus on a thread for the past three months. She thought she would never notice the difference, she'd been living without for such a long time.

-- How beautifully depressing.

This entire story stirred such emotion within me, I cried. I don't cry a lot when reading things, and I cried. This is real talent right here, it was amazing. I really felt her pain, it's so sad :(

PS: I can't really read what I'm typing because the font is so small lol.

[thebubblyterror]

BB, you cried? :( I'm sorry. But thank you! That's sort of what I was hoping for when I wrote it.

(Sorry about the font, I have no idea how to change it or do anything. All I know is that I think grey is pretty, and green is pretty awesome, too.)

[vivianey]

Fucking amazing

[thebubblyterror]

Why, thank you! :)

[sleepy_writer08]

Do my eyes deceive me? Is the fic really posted?? YAY! I'm so proud of you! NOW to return the favor that you bestowed upon me so very long ago *snickers*

In the past, when the wounds were still fresh, Selena would shoot Demi a pained look, the shared hurt screaming "You are not alone" clear as the sky was blue. Since, because they have long since scabbed and healed over with the careful ministrations of kisses and whispered promises, a smug smile would grace Selena's pouting features.

I like this simply because it was so clear cut in my mind. I felt like I was looking at their faces rather than just reading the description.

She knew all too well that every jagged line that danced across Demi's wrists, every broken guitar string, and every miscalculated relationship was in some way, her fault. If she just could have broken through to her sooner, if she just could have saved her, if she just could have confessed the feelings that tore her own soul to shreds.This hurt. I could feel my heart break when i read this line just because

Because LJ is LAME and says my comment is too long....PART DOS

[sleepy_writer08]

*is miffed* My comment was too long and I had to cut it. Not cool LJ, NOT COOL.

Anywhoo....on with the reviewing:

This time, Selena would cut the chord, rather than watch her girl sing the secret lament of forbidden heartbreak from tomes and tomes of compositions scrawled on napkins and loose notebook paper in Demi's looping letters, all repeating the same word etched on the top--her own name.

This? This is where my heart cracked right down the middle.

This same resolution would guide Demi to get over their break; she would use the pain to fuel her future, and to get exactly what she had always wanted. But in Selena's eyes, everything she ever wanted walked out the door with Demi. Her heart, her future, and her soul would disappear with the lost love, like the smiles Demi reserved only for her, and the lingering scent of vanilla she left on Selena's sheets. Still, if it would secure the still shaky ground Demi's career stood on, she would brave the Pacific Ocean, sharks and all. If it could save Demi the pain of publicly coming

Re: Because LJ is LAME and says my comment is too long....PART DOS

[thebubblyterror]

(Favorite comment in the whole fucking world...)

It's been like, what, eighteen hours since you commented this? And I still can't find words. Seems to be happening quite a bit as of late. Hmmmmm... I KNOW, YOU'RE A WIZARD! A... KAYLIE WIZARD?!

Well. Like I said, this is amazing. And you made me cry. For a good three hours last night. And giggle like a maniac. And smile ridiculously? My family thought I was having a mental breakdown.

The last line leaves you wanting more?

And the wall is gone, as you very well know, buuuuut, I can still be humble, right?

AND BB I THINK IT'S HILARIOUS THAT YOUR FAVORITE PART IN THIS ANGST RIDDEN BEAST IS A SWEET LIGHTHEARTED LINE!

Re: Because LJ is LAME and says my comment is too long....PART DOS

[sleepy_writer08]

(that's what youuu thinkkkk LOL but thank you)

Well now were even because when I first read this fic, I was the Exact. Same. Way. I'm a Kaylie wizard? Cool, I'm flattered. Well in case you don't know already, you're a Bianca wizard!

Oh no! Three hours? That's not good but I'm glad I could make you happy too. I wasn't much better off though, I cried and when anyone asked me what was wrong all I could say was "Kaylie's being so sweet and she's making me cry!" No one really understood lol but that's okay because I didn't expect them too.
It did! My mind is in overdrive thinking of where you could take this!

I love that line just because it was like this ray of light in the whole thing where the two are just so into each other and the whole confession is done so realistically that I fell in love with it.

Of course you can be humble! I'm just going to compliment you off your feet sporadically. You'll never know what's coming and when.

[takemeback]

OMG. I'm kind of speechless right now. That was so beautiful and depressing and moving. But in a GOOD way. And I was listening to Josh Pyke's "The Doldrums" as I read this which made it all the more powerful. I can't believe you said you never write fic... you've been withholding a lot of talent from us for too long. :)

[thebubblyterror]

Thank you, Christine. ♥ I looked up "The Doldrums." It took me forevvvvvvvverrrr to find it online, but MAN. That song basically epitomizes how I felt when I was writing this. It's beautiful. I might just have to use it as inspiration should when I continue this.

...After I write our crack!fic.

[thebubblyterror]

I'm lefting praying that it isn't.
Me too. :( If it was, then I would get sued for plagiarism. :P Well. I probably could get sued for writing this anyways.
Your comment made me smile. :D
...Except for the heartbreak part.
But that was sort of the point.
Thank you. :)