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Author: themidnighter16
Rating: PG
Pairing: Draco/Hermione
Author's Note: It's short, I know. And it might have some flaws but give it a try?
Disclaimer: Nope,'am not JK Rowling =(
Summary: 'War changes things,Hermione.' That's what he said, but he didn't mention feeling nothing.
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Rating: PG
Pairing: Draco/Hermione
Author's Note: It's short, I know. And it might have some flaws but give it a try?
Disclaimer: Nope,'am not JK Rowling =(
Summary: 'War changes things,Hermione.' That's what he said, but he didn't mention feeling nothing.
( Read Here... )
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Just two things that nagged me a bit (sorry, grammar nazi...):
- 'You’re tears flowing freely.' I think you mean 'Your tears flowing freely.'
- I got very confused with the switching between present and past tense verbs. I would suggest writing it all in the past tense, but that's really up to you.
Anyway, once again, great setting, lovely writing. I really enjoyed reading it.
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no,it's okay, thank you for pointing out my mistakes I'll change the you're to your...
and sorry if my tenses are very confusing (i'll work on that,hehehe)
I'm really glad that you enjoyed reading it, thanks again for pointing out my mistakes!
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Just a few things though- I agree with the previous commenter, the switching back and forth between tenses was kind of confusing at times. Whatever tense you choose, try to be consistent. There were also a few grammer issues, but nothing a beta reader couldn't fix.(I'm an english teacher, so I'm a bit OCD about this kind of stuff, lol)
Overall, I think you did a good job. I don't typically enjoy reading things in second person point of view, but I think the emotions were lovely and it was an enjoyable read! Great job!
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I know my tenses are confusing at times, I will really work on it! And the grammar... I really do need to get a beta,hehehe.
But no worries, I don't hate you or anything :D I know my english teacher would do the same if she read my work,hahaha. Thank you I really appreciate it, thank you for pointing out my flaws :D And I'm really glad that somehow I changed your view about reading second person POV!
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Awesome story! Very well-written and lots of angst!
Teach me how to write! ;D Every time I try to write a fanfic, I always end up with complete crap. Soooooo, you should tutor me on "How To Create An Excellent D/Hr Fanfic". :D
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Thank you for reading it I REALLY appreciate your support :D
No DHr fic is crap especially if the fic is made by a friend of mine.
Hahahaha. I think that we should trade notes in writing DHr...
Don't you think so? =))
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No prob! I really enjoyed the fic. It's a great way to start your writing career! ;D
Aww, thanks. If I finish a fic, I'll send it to you first to see what you think. :)
LMAO, we should trade notes. But just to warn you, I have the worst notes EVER. It might not help you. ;)
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