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thosewerepearls

Fic: In the light of the morning

Mar 02, 2010 14:21

Title: In the light of the morning
Author: thosewerepearls
Pairing: Neal/Peter
Rating: PG-13/R
Disclaimer: None, really. General spoilers for earlier episodes
Summary: A study of dynamics. Sequel to You would wish long and long to be with him

( To see him pass conveys as much as the best poem; perhaps more )

fic, white collar

Comments 11

elrhiarhodan March 2 2010, 20:37:35 UTC

Mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

More?

thosewerepearls March 4 2010, 23:35:21 UTC

hahah. probably not actually. sorry.

dracofiend March 2 2010, 22:34:56 UTC

now that just makes me want to cry, in theory. It's so fantastic the way you write in that sort of disjointed distance--it really feels like you're watching someone while also being them at the same time...

thosewerepearls March 4 2010, 23:36:21 UTC

Thank you. I think fanfiction is a fun way to experiment with writing. Some people will disagree that it isn't "real" writing, but you get to try out so many more styles.

Are you planning on continuing this series? sentineljandb March 3 2010, 04:09:18 UTC

I loved the second chapter!

So Peter wanted to pretend it never happened. I am glad Neal made the first move and got Peter to give it another try.

Are you planning on continuing this series? I think the coworkers and Elisabeth especially, will know something is wrong. I think it would be interesting to see El’s reaction to the affair.

I think Peter will not be able to deny that he and Neal are having an affair, and he is officially cheating on his wife.

Thanks again for sharing your vision with us!

Re: Are you planning on continuing this series? thosewerepearls March 4 2010, 23:37:03 UTC

I really don't see myself continuing the series. I didn't even see myself writing this. I'm a fan of oneshots, to be honest.

euphonious_glow March 4 2010, 22:25:29 UTC

You have a really interesting writing style and a way of showing the characters that is really different. I liked the first chapter a lot, and this one kills. There are so many little poignant lines.

There are quite a few typos, though, so a beta could probably help you catch those. Otherwise, I think your style of writing is very unique and interesting and emotionally powerful. Keep it up!

thosewerepearls March 4 2010, 23:39:20 UTC

Thank you. And yes. I do acknowledge I need a beta, I simply don't know how I go about that, so. But I just love these characters, especially Peter. I sometimes get so caught up with ideas that typos happen. You understand.

petit_baobab March 14 2010, 04:00:18 UTC

This is beautiful writing, even if I don't particularly recognize this Peter. Thank you!