LJ Idol - Week 2: Living rent-free in your head

[tonithegreat]

A woman sits back in her office chair enjoying a momentary lull in the storm. She knows she hasn’t gotten this far by resting on her laurels whenever she gets the chance, though. One satisfied stretch and a glance across the many accolades that hang dispersed among the rich wood-framed family photos and signifiers of position. Not a moment to

Comments

[bleodswean]

This is so gorgeous and relatable and real. I love love love the way you bring in the overlay that is so evident in our lives we share with the world the universe eternity. I like your poem!

[tonithegreat]

Thanks! Someday I really want to dig into poetry and read a bunch and study it and work hard on my own. For now, I’m thankful for Idol kicking me into it occasionally.

[uselesstinrelic]

I like the choice you made to phrase this section the way you did: "it mirrors the look of smaller biology on a macro scale. The rivers as veins, as capillaries. The hills like muscle over bone."

[tonithegreat]

Thank you kindly!

[sweeny_todd]

I think it's really easy to not remember the simple things. I'm glad they are in there too :)

[tonithegreat]

There is a lot of beauty in the simple! I’m trying to keep it in mind. Thank you.

[rayaso]

I enjoyed this very much, especially your poem. Combining the poem with the story worked very well.

[tonithegreat]

Thank you! That poem is something I’d like to go back to at some point. So many thoughts hit me when I’m lucky enough to fly.

[tijuanagringo]

A walk from everyday concern into poetic mountain tops. Movement from prose into verse. I feel a real person here, a character dwelling, in her head, on daily social needs, and moving into a more private, and yes, more simple place, where, paradoxically, one reflects the universal hunger to make something macro rise up from the micro. Or vice versa? Perhaps I babble. Thank you for sharing your vision with us.

[tonithegreat]

Babble begets babble beautifully. I appreciate your comment- wanted to let folks in. Really glad you enjoyed.