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Beautifully Broken: Chapter 6

Feb 05, 2010 02:34

Title: Beautifully Broken
Author: E.E. Kelley
Summary: Without Christopher to keep him hidden, Wikus was quickly found by the MNU and forced back into captivity. The transformation too far along, there was little the officers could do but allow it to complete itself. Yet, even after he has become fully Prawn, they keep him around, determined to use ( Read more... )

district 9, science fiction, fic: beautifully broken

Comments 14

synaltern February 4 2010, 21:46:51 UTC

A nice read - and great update. Couple of things, though.

I caught this:
He wanted there to be no harm no fowl...
I think you mean 'foul', seeing as 'fowl' refers to birds.

As for whether the prawns have gills or some much-more-sophisticated-than-Earth insects' breathing systems, its up to the author's interpretation. So long as it makes sense its all good! (though I'll admit I tend to picture something that functions as gills)

karaq February 4 2010, 22:33:12 UTC

Yay. You updated! :-)
I know that RL can get in the way (for us fangirls), but I am glad you decided to go back to the story. Sounds awesome that you have a whole 'book' planned out!

As for the chapter --> OMG. Christopher/Wikus interaction!!!!! XD It was very nice to see Christopher comforting Wikus, and Wikus somewhat accepting comfort. I also found Wikus very much in character when it came to the wish to be able to speak normally. Even though he has been through years of physical and mental torture he still has a hidden strenth and is able to move forward.

You listen to us readers? Hmm... LONGER CHAPTERS, PLZ?! ^^ Anything else? Hmm... You probably adressed this in a former chapter, but is CJ back on the planet? Perhaps you'll delve deeper into the 'Prawn' culture/structure later on?
Have we seen the last of the 'big black prawn'?

Anyways. Already looking forward to the next update!

~KaraQ

m0rningl0ry February 5 2010, 07:57:23 UTC

SO happy to see that you updated ^^. I really like how you've written Wikus. I think a lot of slash fic writers forget they don't have to toss characterization out the window, and I'm glad you haven't done that: Wikus still has his old prejudices to deal with, plus the effects of the last three years. You've been really great at keeping the characters true to themselves ( ... )

mckay_ocd February 5 2010, 12:41:26 UTC

Yay!!! New chapter! :D

Awwww poor Wikus! :'( He is very broken. Yay for comforting Chris! He seems quite pissed off about what happened to Wikus still. Where is Chris' son?

Can't wait for more!

cyprith February 5 2010, 14:30:44 UTC

I'd like you to continue being so amazing. xD Beyond that, I really can't complain. Though Christopher's son would be a nice addition. At first I thought the food-bringer might turn out to be him, but I think Oliver would be happier to see Wikus.

Please write more soon. Even if it's like a paragraph, I'd love to read it. :)