I really liked this :) and it's not even a pairing I'm into.
The kid’s actually a welcome presence and he’s (for some reason) quick to do what Marat asks. Not that he’s trying to ask too much and it’s mostly just to see what Tomas would do.
When he comes scampering, like an overgrown ball kid, offering Marat his towel and what appears to be a half empty bottle of water Marat asks, “why?”
This part made me remember a fan account of Tomas fetching powerades and water for Marat during some practice session at I think Miami or Indian Wells one year. lol.
I just loved reading this story. I loved Tomas's persistent pursuit of an annoyed Marat. Dinara was a wonderful addition to the story and I love her reaction to Marat's cynicism.
my feedback never does you justice, it's not fair ):quinolineSeptember 28 2007, 07:15:20 UTC
oh my god let me recompose myself just for a sec.
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OKAY I LOVE THIS. BUT YOU KNOW WHAT?? I LOVE YOU EVEN MORE. i have no idea where to start-- this whole thing is perfection, 100% fucking perfection.
1) i love dinara and i can't profess to knowing her much, but i think you wrote her amazingly. she may act more mature and sensible than marat, but deep down you know she's just like him :'D AND SHE CALLED TOMAS A PONY.
2) and okay so marat calling tomas "paris" may just be the cutest thing ever.
3) “Blind?” he asks.
“No, I see,” Tomas says
WHAT THE FUCK BEST DIALOGUE IN THE WHOLE WORLD I SWEAR ;3; HAHAHHAHA ohmygod ohmygod you = genius kthxbai.
4) i love that this is intertwined with so many true events (watching marat and cincinnati, fetching his water bottles, the practice in new york, paris-- the stuff that noone would realise unless they were obsessed like us ;D it's amazing because it's all so true, you know?!) and tomas is so fucking cute with the water bottle and the towel and all his "i like you"s. my god he is
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Re: my feedback never does you justice, it's not fair ):tourofdutySeptember 28 2007, 14:55:06 UTC
UM DO NOT EVER HATE ON YOUR FEEDBACK BECAUSE THIS IS AMAZING. I AM BLUSHING AND ASLDFJADSLKFJ I HAD THE BIGGEST GRIN ON MY FACE THE WHOLE TIME I WAS READING THIS BECAUSE IT WAS JUST SO FUCKING SWEET ANDF ADLFKJ I'M JUST SO GLAD YOU LIKED THIS FIC AND OMG I JUST RE-READ THIS AND I'M STILL BLUSHING D: I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU
i totally threw the pony thing in there for you! i tried to make this littered with all of our little marat/tomas things so i had to have pony in there somewhere! but i agree, about dinara. i mean she's more mature than marat but in the end she's showing that she's just like marat
HAHAHSDLFKJ I WAS HOPING YOU WOULD LOVE THE "BLIND" PART AND I'M GLAD I WASN'T WRONG!
ahh i'm so glad you're picking up on all of that! the whole time i was writing this (while listening to your awesome mix) i had in mind all the conversations that we had had about them and all the things we had dug up about them and i'm just so glad that you liked the characterization because i LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE your tomas
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I love your fic. Really. The way you write just throws you right into the story. And Marat and Tomas are jusst perfect. Plus, you used details and I am so a sucker for the details. :D
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The kid’s actually a welcome presence and he’s (for some reason) quick to do what Marat asks. Not that he’s trying to ask too much and it’s mostly just to see what Tomas would do.
When he comes scampering, like an overgrown ball kid, offering Marat his towel and what appears to be a half empty bottle of water Marat asks, “why?”
This part made me remember a fan account of Tomas fetching powerades and water for Marat during some practice session at I think Miami or Indian Wells one year. lol.
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Haha, that's actually what that was based on. That story always, always sends my fangirl into overdrive.
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Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. :)
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Thank you for writing :)
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OKAY I LOVE THIS. BUT YOU KNOW WHAT?? I LOVE YOU EVEN MORE. i have no idea where to start-- this whole thing is perfection, 100% fucking perfection.
1) i love dinara and i can't profess to knowing her much, but i think you wrote her amazingly. she may act more mature and sensible than marat, but deep down you know she's just like him :'D AND SHE CALLED TOMAS A PONY.
2) and okay so marat calling tomas "paris" may just be the cutest thing ever.
3) “Blind?” he asks.
“No, I see,” Tomas says
WHAT THE FUCK BEST DIALOGUE IN THE WHOLE WORLD I SWEAR ;3; HAHAHHAHA ohmygod ohmygod you = genius kthxbai.
4) i love that this is intertwined with so many true events (watching marat and cincinnati, fetching his water bottles, the practice in new york, paris-- the stuff that noone would realise unless they were obsessed like us ;D it's amazing because it's all so true, you know?!) and tomas is so fucking cute with the water bottle and the towel and all his "i like you"s. my god he is ( ... )
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i totally threw the pony thing in there for you! i tried to make this littered with all of our little marat/tomas things so i had to have pony in there somewhere! but i agree, about dinara. i mean she's more mature than marat but in the end she's showing that she's just like marat
HAHAHSDLFKJ I WAS HOPING YOU WOULD LOVE THE "BLIND" PART AND I'M GLAD I WASN'T WRONG!
ahh i'm so glad you're picking up on all of that! the whole time i was writing this (while listening to your awesome mix) i had in mind all the conversations that we had had about them and all the things we had dug up about them and i'm just so glad that you liked the characterization because i LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE your tomas ( ... )
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LOL YOU SOUND LIKE NOVAK
tomas is such a little pony, you know it!! HIS HAPPY HEAD TOSS. HOW DOES ANYONE COMPETE WITH THAT. NEIGH.
THAT CONVERSATION WAS THE BEST I HAVE EVER READ. AMAZING AMAZING. IT MAKES ME LOVE THEM EVEN MORE, IF THAT IS EVEN POSSIBLE.
courtni. we are psychicly connected. you know it. you incorporated everything in here and it is so fucking awesome~!!!!! PS: TOMAS IS YOURS TOO!!
i'm so happy you don't think my feedback isn't massive amounts of lame because everytime i read my feedback its like OMG. DO NOT WANT.
I MISS WRITING BUT I JUST CAN'T SOBBBBBB YOU KNOW I ONLY WRITE FOR YOU!! IF I DIDN'T HAVE YOU TO WRITE FOR, I'D BE LIKE BZZZZZ WRITING WHO CARES.
yay~! ♥!
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Basically, this is saying write more. :P
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Oh, I definitely plan to. :)
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