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brigits_flame 's Main contest week one prompt of "tragically hip". I reeeeeally skated in at the last second on this, and I'm not at all pleased. Believe it or not, this is only HALF the story I'd wanted to write, but the story was too much for LJ's posting limits to take ... so I had to cut it. And because of that, I'm now compelled to write a
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-and the way you set it up and mixed all those lovely Tragically Hip songs into actual pieces of the story! Very, VERY well done, Toxic.
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And duuuuuude! You picked up on the incorporation of the theme! *fist pump* YUS!
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Thanks again for reading and commenting!
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" It was a survival instinct that served those of his sex very well." So. Much. Truth.
I think your strength here is definitely in the creation and description of this little metal world. It's super original, and your little side notes about the sun wanting to rust off the rooster, etc. are just icing on the cake. Also, Boots is so adorable it hurts. However, I thought the transition into the story proper was a bit formal and clunky. It didn't have the right tone/sense of humor to blend with the introduction. The dialogue is really strong throughout.
And either you're writing a serial, or your sending me the un-cut version because this makes me super happy. And toaster-strudel-style...LOLOLOLOLOLOL. Excellence.
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This WILL actually be a serial. After taking a look at week two's prompt, I'm actually kinda glad the whole entry couldn't fit. The new prompt is already giving me loads of ideas on how to expand this out.
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Keep up the good work with this, though, Tox! It's fabulous, really. You're going to own this week for sure.
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