My Fanfic - Viewfinder

[toyakoya]

Hong Kong is very similar to Tokyo. Sometimes, when he’s standing in the heart of Shinjuku, he would look up and the skyscrapers, neon lights, and oversized billboards would blur together. The push-and-shove of people, milling and aimless, focused and hurried, moved around him and bumped past him; he felt like a tiny,

Comments

[golden_bastet]

That's really well done - and very sad, because it probably reflects more of the trauma that Akihito is going to have to work through, while Asami doesn't seem to understand / break through on a certain level.

...Or does he?

Thank you for that.

[toyakoya]

Wow, you read this fairly quickly! Thanks for the comment. =)

Yes, I made Akihito a bit more brittle than in the manga; I also wanted to explore the dynamic between Asami and Akihito (for example: is their affection mutual, etc.)

Does Asami understand..? Well, I left it a little ambiguous. ^^;;

[golden_bastet]

Does Asami understand..? Well, I left it a little ambiguous. ^^;;

And that's the magic of it. %^}

[trinityblood1]

wow hot and sexy, really a great after story, thank you for posting

[toyakoya]

Ah, I'm glad to hear that you thought it was sexy. I main goal was to try to make the sex... well, sexy. Hahaha ^^;; It'll take a while before I can be more refined I think. :P

Thanks for the comment.

[toyakoya]

Whoops, that should've been "MY main goal..."

[iamjusttoocool]

wow thats a completly new way to imagine it. im so used to seeing aki consumed by asami, (i dont mind it of course hehe) but here you show a much darker and depressing side that I'm sure many poeple have questioned. Amazing is all I can say ^_^

[toyakoya]

Thank you for the comment! ^^;; Its very reassuring. I've been out of the Yamane Ayano fanfic writing community for a while now (several years? haha) and I was a bit hesitant to post something in case was already a cliche. ^^;;

[angel0399]

This is pretty nice! I like that you focused more on his trauma, his struggle to deal with it, and him trying to get back to his life. At the end, you wrote Asami to realize and have compassion for his lover, which I believe is important in their chemistry. *thumbs up*

[toyakoya]

Thank you for your comment. =)

I'm glad that you enjoyed the story *very happy*

Really well written :-)

[checklost]

Thank you for this tantalizing and erotic story. The pace and detail make the story very engaging. In the same time as Takaba is further draw in to Asami so was I while reading your story.

Joanna :-)

Re: Really well written :-)

[toyakoya]

Thank you for your comment! ^_^;;
Your comment is making me coo, hahaha. See what you've reduced me to? Lol. ;)

Thanks again :)