fanfiction || Just Don't [Bleach] || drabble

[tumbleberry]

Comments

[slipstreme]

Interesting use of sentence structure to convey Hitsugaya's inner turmoil. I like it. It's almost poetic without being poetry.

[tumbleberry]

Thanks. <3

This scene really caught me both in the manga and anime. The pause before he goes completely berserk is amazing. XD

[afteriwake]

I'm just going to second what slipstreme said. This is really like a poem, in the imagery you used.

[tumbleberry]

Dawww thank you <3333

Thanks for commenting. ^^

[zoldyck_fan]

The only thing I would change about it, because the rest is beautiful, would be to change the last word to "silence" or "nothing." But that's just me.

The way you threw in slashes, periods, italics, bold - all in unorthodox places, worked wonders for showing that inconsistency and unbalanced nature of Hitsugaya's thought process.

Very cool.

/finally comments in the right place, yes

[tumbleberry]

Ohhh~ that's good. <3
See? This is the kind of comment I need. LOL

>///< Thanks.
I think it's because I read a wonderful book on the mental-state of an anorexic girl... it was so well written and hauntingly beautiful. O.O I actually had nightmares. LOL

^^ Thanks. <3

/cheers~

[zoldyck_fan]

Heheh. Good.

Oooh. Yes, I can see where that might come into play.

[tumbleberry]

<3

/is easily influenced by writing that i read.
LOL

[mailnosecret]

Nggghh this is beautiful, especially the cadence ♥

[tumbleberry]

It was actually partially inspired by you. <333

Your Yamada-serialkiller fic had me spazzing for about half an hour. :3

Thank you~

[mailnosecret]

omg thank you. And thank you for taking the time to read it lol, it was pretty long ;~;

But really you should write more on this verse *A*

[tumbleberry]

I loved it.
I'm actually writing another piece, also serial killer, that's inspired by your piece.

You're amazing. <3 you know that? XDDD

I know that Belinda thinks so too. LOL

Ahahah~ I think I will ^_~

[nagasasu]

The sentence structure is really well-done (as another commenter mentioned) to show Hitsugaya's stream of thoughts. I like it. :) Have you thought about posting this in the hitsuhina comm too?

[tumbleberry]

Thanks. <333

Is it very active? LOL
It would be kind of pointless if it's a dead com. I'll look into it. Thanks. :3

I'm so disconnected as to all the different fandom coms and whatnot LOL

[nagasasu]

Yeahhhh, the comm's been pretty quiet lately; not dead yet though. They're trying to liven it up with a fic contest with prizes.

LOL, I know right? That's why I woundup watching Bleach news instead. XD

[tumbleberry]

Posted to the HitsuHina com.

LOL same here. I watch Bleach-news
Let them do the work, and we'll just check out the compilation at the end. LOL
lazyyy~ we are. ^^

[kellenanne]

That was really lovely. Haunting, even. That moment in time just kills me every. time. I see it.

[tumbleberry]

Thank you <3333

^^