Fic: Pale

[twiga13]

Well, here’s my first attempt at writing a fic :D

I wrote it to the song Pale by Within Temptation.

Plz tell my what you think about it, critics are very welcome ^-^

Hope you’ll like it!

Title: Pale

Pairing: hints of Asami/Aki

Warnings: none I guess…

Rating: PG 13 (I think so at least…)

Disclaimer: All characters belong to Yamane Ayano

Summary: Aki’s

Comments

[slowmomox]

:} I think that was a wonderful story. I like the style that you wrote it in, how there's that one line...and beneath it theres a few that other lines that relates back to the topic :}

Also, i think that is what Aki is feeling, how he's seen it all and he really can't seem to go back to how he was before since he's been exposed to so much. :} And yes, he wants Asami to save him. ^_____^~~

It was a wonderful story. Hehe i feel like its more of a poem though. :] I liked it alot~~ Thank you for sharing. ^^ I think you did a great job on it.

[twiga13]

yay, first comment to my story! :D

thank you so much, I was so nervous about this (^-^)

hihi, hopefully he wants asami to save him, if not then what would happen to the story?? ;)

thanks for your help with the posting too XD
I'm very glad you liked it!

[tailor3141]

I very much like it, it travels through so many thoughts and emotions in such rapid ways....hits home very well
I can't wait for this to happen in the manga *stares at Yamane-sensei*

thanks for this~

[twiga13]

:D thanks, glad you like it!
yeah, hopefully aki soon gets back to asami...
thanks for correcting too~~

I'm happy you think it hits home very well, I really tried my best (^-^)

[reallifesucks]

It is powerfull!!

To want to forget, to leave everything behind you - and not being able to do it...
Wow!

Thank you.

[twiga13]

:) I'm happy that you like it!

I think everything that happened to aki won't be left behind very easily...

thanks for reading!

[randrews25]

Love it girlfriend, you wrote it beautifully :)
I hope you write more, thanks for sharing ^___^

[twiga13]

yay, thanks :D
hmm, I'll think about it ^-^

thanks for reading, glad you liked it!

[mssupafan]

Congrads on posting your first fic! Lots of emotion, thoughtful. Good job! ^_^

[twiga13]

thanks for reading :D

I'm very happy that you liked it!