Paying Extra [10/13]

[undying_desire]

Comments

[kutunakal]

Yaaaaaay! Spot pleaseeeee...

[kutunakal]

Ahhh, the smut is.. satisfying... Thank you, haha...

Yunho won't comeback, will he?

Thanks for updating, I need the next chapter, pleaseeeee.. hahaha

[undying_desire]

We finally made it to the smut. Hehe. That took long enough. ~.^

Um. . . Yunho may show up again. *Whistles* But it won't be until the last few chapters. I wouldn't stress over it.

Gah, I feel so bad for what I'm going to do now. *Hides* Stay tuned.

[jin2jin]

that was just perfect. no other words would explain it

"Beautiful." He repeated.

I'll repeat it too >D

[undying_desire]

Awe, thank you, darling. I'm glad you liked it so well. ^.^

++<3++

[ninevolt_doll]

You know when a song stops somewhere in the middle and you think it's over, but then the second verse starts in full force? That's what it felt like when I read the part when Seunghyun momentarily ceased his movement and asked how far would Jiyong want to go~

I never thought someone could write a smut scene as beautiful as a song, so thanks for writing! :)

Re: ++<3++

[undying_desire]

This is officially the most descriptive way anyone has ever described one of my chapters. I absolutely love it. You made me blush so much. *Bows*

Thank you for reading. ^.^

Re: ++<3++

[ninevolt_doll]

it's your chapter that got me writing that comment~ so thank you :)

[usoshigo]

For a first time smut this was good. But with some minor mistakes.
Like: precum ain't white, it totally transparent and that Seunghyun was waaaaay too fast when he pepped Ji. It takes a long time for the body to adapt when having anal sex, since it's a big muscle that needs to be relaxed and also that the anal doesn't produce 'natural lube' as the vagina do ^^

[undying_desire]

I'll remember this for next time. I wasn't sure how drawn out the prepping should be, but now I'll be sure to work on it more. *Bows* Thanks so much for helping. ^^

[usoshigo]

Oh, I'm happy that you didn't think I was sounding like a bitch. ^-^
I remembered another thing(that actually almost every writer fails on) It's kind of rare that a guy produces enough precum to actually make "a pool" out of it. A teaspoon at it's highest and if you produce more then you better visit the hospital! x'D
Just ask if you want to know anything(I have some experience :3)

[undying_desire]

*lol* Not bitchy sounding at all. I know I'm not going to be very good at smut yet so I asked for help. =P Haha, I'll try to keep them away from the hospital from now on, too.

May I add you as a friend? ^.^

[erikaoi]

Its hawt babe.love it.

[undying_desire]

Awe yay, I'm glad you enjoyed it, hun. =)