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An abridged translation of feelings

Jan 18, 2009 20:28

Author: inpurity
Title: An abridged translation of feelings
Genre: Angst/Romance
Rating: R for language
Fandom: Frank Iero/Gerard Way
Summary:It's 2002, the early days of the band. A beginning marred by too many drugs, too much alcohol, a persistent wannabe manager, and the confusion that is born out of feelings that are too scary to make sense. It's the ( Read more... )

abridged translation of feelings, frank iero, fiction, mcr, gerard way, rater r

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jealousmess January 18 2009, 21:25:45 UTC

Wow.
This was amazing.
mem'ing now. ♥

inpurity January 18 2009, 22:05:18 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm glad you like it.

elphi8 January 18 2009, 21:34:57 UTC

ooo, i really really like :)

inpurity January 18 2009, 22:09:52 UTC

Thank you very much!

iwalkalone84 January 18 2009, 22:27:43 UTC

I LOVED the wording in this! So many phrases caught my attention and added so much to what was already a beautiful story. With a perfect ending. Some of my favorites...

..."it’s another question, slurred and sticky in his mouth."

"Gerard’s eyes are all burnt black pupils and nothing else by now"...

..."body tense under the wiring of his nerves"

"Frank can feel the ragged edges of Gerard’s teeth writing new scars on his skin."

"Gerard’s voice is soft, clear. There is no sticky numbness in his words, and Frank wants to know how that voice tastes, what it is to have it slide inside his mouth, poured clean."

It's all so visceral, the feelings and thoughts and physical descriptions. Beautiful. <3

inpurity January 18 2009, 23:42:28 UTC

Thank you so much! I am really glad you liked it so much.

faithfulriver26 January 18 2009, 22:39:54 UTC

urgh. this is absolutely gorgeous. Seriously, it blows my fucking mind.
I absolutely love reading what you write for bits like this:

Frank’s voice comes muffled, stretched and gooey like cotton candy ( ... )

inpurity January 18 2009, 23:44:15 UTC

*BLUSHES SO HARD*

You always touch my heart with your words, I am so glad you liked it, and I have not enough words to thank you.

Laila
XXX

suchaprettydoll January 18 2009, 22:59:55 UTC

You are an incredibly gifted writer and a gift to this community. You write with a stream of consciousness that I envy. Each line is there for a reason and you can make a reader hang on each shift in phrase.
Enid x

inpurity January 18 2009, 23:44:48 UTC

Thank you so much!
I am really glad you liked it, thanks again.

Lx