Bones Redux - Chapter 1 : The Pain in the Heart

[va32h]

A/N: This is a premise I have considered since the first time I ever saw this episode. While most of my fic writing was about working with canon (or working to make sense of canon), I always came back to this episode, to the idea that this episode was really the first time I thought the series could have truly gone the other way and worked and made

Comments

[curiousbluecat]

Loved your take on re-imagining the events of the episode. I also thought that Booth was just standing up when he got in the way of Pam's bullet! But I did love his explanation that he would have gotten shot on purpose if he'd had the time to orient him self.

Zack's motivation here makes much more sense to me than how it actually played out onscreen. Protecting Brennan would be something for which he would risk himself.

Oh...and a big thank you for the image of Booth and the small towel :-)

[officelove_10]

Thank you! This whole Zach story makes WAY more sense then the way it actually happened!

I also totally agree on Booth just standing up and happening to get shot. No matter how many times I've watched it, I never thought it looked like he actually intentionally took that bullet.

Can't wait for more! I've missed your writing!

[cjsmom3]

Beyond giddy to have you writing fanfic again, even if it is just a temporary condition.

I much prefer this version of Pain in the Heart. I always thought it seemed way off to have Zack suddenly team up with a serial killer, no matter how "logical" the argument. So I usually just pretend it doesn't exist, even when I watch that episode ;-)

It did look to me like Booth was just standing up to see what was going on, but I'd never given it much thought before.

It's refreshing to see Brennan being herself again. Somewhat clueless but at least aware of her cluelessness and not a robot masquerading as a human. I hope that made sense. It's been a very busy week and I am so very tired.

Anyway, looking forward to future updates. Do you have a length/endpoint/destination in mind or are you just writing as the muse strikes you?

[va32h]

I would like to get through the end of season 4 at least, but I am doing a lot of other things, and I don't always feel Bonesy. But I'll try.

[huronia]

"You don't have to know everything, Bones."

"But that's what I'm used to!"

A quick laugh escaped his throat; he swallowed it, then kissed her gently on the forehead. "You'll get used to this too."

That was my favourite exchange of this chapter. Thanks for getting back on the Bones fic horse for another ride.

[rankor01]

I'm not as hung up on Booth taking the bullet voluntarily vs not as he would do it consciously in a heartbeat, but I do like your reasoning there and that Booth was pretty arrogant and foolish (Brennan too) in dismissing the warning signs. As bad as Sweets was in not telling Brennan, I remember that when thinking about how things went out.

Loved the way you handled Zach here, it would have been infinitely superior to how it was resolved on the show. I am not overly sympathetic that 'the writer's strike made it suck' as it's their job to make a story make sense. This could have been done without changing any of the scenes around other than minor dialogue.

I thought the way you had them together was realistic and well written too, especially with saying that in future years he wouldn't remember.

Great job as well portraying Brennan's all consuming need for control. It's not something I particularly like in her character, but I'll concede it's realistic in her context and well done here. Looking forward to where you go with this.